Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors (e.g., use past tense consistently: “had” not “have”; correct modal/auxiliary forms). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas and give a specific example of your bike or a memory to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was seven because my parents encouraged me and taught me in our neighborhood park. Riding that bike gave me confidence and freedom, and I remember racing with my friends every weekend.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example “because” and “so”). Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect word forms (e.g., “public transportation” singular, avoid filler words like “dear”). Use clearer structure and a concrete statistic or example if possible to support your claim.

예시: Not really. In the Philippines bicycles are less common because traffic is heavy and people prefer motor vehicles for longer commutes. For example, on my daily route I usually see many cars, jeepneys, and buses, and rarely anyone cycling, especially during rush hour.

× I think most of the children will have a bike since they are young and their parents gonna taught them umm to to know how to ride.

✓ I think most children have a bike from a young age because their parents teach them how to ride.

Errors: 'will have' and tense/auxiliary mismatch, 'gonna taught' is nonstandard and mixes future/informal 'gonna' with past 'taught'. This is a third person singular/plural verb agreement and tense choice issue. Use simple present 'have' for general truths/habits and present simple 'teach' to show parents habitually do this. Also streamline phrasing: 'from a young age' and 'teach them how to ride.' Suggestions: use standard forms (have, teach) and avoid informal 'gonna.'

× So of course I have a bike and I think it is a very nice and good experience for us to learn something new.

✓ So of course I had a bike and I think it was a very nice experience for us to learn something new.

The question asked about childhood (past), so tense should be past. 'Have' and 'is' are present; change to past 'had' and 'was.' Also 'very nice and good' is redundant; choose one adjective. Suggestions: match tense to context and avoid redundant adjectives.

× I would say not 'cause I'm currently living in the Philippines and I barely see bikes in my daily lives cause the traffic is like very heavy and a traffic jam is always happened dear.

✓ I would say no because I currently live in the Philippines and I rarely see bikes in my daily life because the traffic is very heavy and traffic jams happen often.

Multiple present tense and usage issues: 'I'm currently living' is acceptable but 'currently live' is simpler. 'I barely see' could be 'rarely see.' 'Daily lives' should be singular 'daily life.' 'Traffic is like very heavy' contains filler 'like' and informal tone. 'A traffic jam is always happened' is ungrammatical; use 'traffic jams happen' or 'there are always traffic jams.' Suggestions: use simple present for general facts, avoid filler words like 'like' and informal address 'dear.'

× So you could actually see more cars, more jeeps, more public transportations than a bike or even cars are.

✓ So you can actually see more cars, more jeepneys, and more public transportation than bikes.

Errors: 'public transportations' is uncountable and should be 'public transportation,' 'jeeps' in Philippines often called 'jeepneys' but 'jeeps' plural is acceptable; ensure parallel structure and correct comparison: compare plural to plural ('more ... than bikes'). The trailing 'or even cars are' is ungrammatical and unnecessary. Suggestions: keep parallel noun forms, use correct plurality when comparing, and remove redundant fragments.