Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural, relevant and well-structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, avoid minor informal contractions/abbreviations (e.g., "1st") and make sentence sequencing smoother using a linking word to connect the memory (e.g., "As a result" or "In fact"). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use "training wheels initially" instead of "at 1st") and reduce redundancy by combining short clauses.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had training wheels initially, and I mainly rode it around the park near my house because my parents worried about busy roads. As a result, I would cycle there with my friends almost every weekend until I was twelve.

제안: Your response addresses the question and gives reasons and examples, but it is slightly unfinished (sentence trailing off) and could be clearer with better linking phrases and more precise vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like "some places"; specify examples (urban vs rural). Use linking words ("however", "for example") correctly and finish sentences. Also watch for small grammatical issues: "go short distance" → "travel short distances".

예시: Bikes are quite popular in urban areas of my country, but less so in rural regions. In big cities many people travel short distances by bike because it is cheap and often faster than driving in heavy traffic. For example, students and office workers frequently cycle to university or work, and some cities have dedicated bike lanes to support this.

× It had training wheels at 1st and I used it to ride around the park near my house because my parents didn't want me on busy roads.

✓ It had training wheels at first and I used it to ride around the park near my house because my parents didn't want me riding on busy roads.

The phrase 'at 1st' is informal and numeric; use 'at first'. The clause 'didn't want me on busy roads' is understandable but more natural and grammatically consistent to use the verb + -ing form after verbs of preference/avoidance (want, prefer): 'didn't want me riding on busy roads.' This clarifies the continuous action and aligns with standard usage. Suggestion: Replace numeric shorthand with 'first' and use the -ing form after 'want' when describing an action you do not want someone to perform.

× Well, bikes are fairly popular in some places, but not everywhere.

✓ Well, bikes are fairly popular in some places, but not everywhere.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present general statement; no change is necessary. Keep the present simple to describe general facts or habitual situations.

× In big cities, many people use bikes to go short distance because it's cheap and faster than driving in traffic, and there are bike lanes in some areas, for example, students and office workers often cycle to work or.

✓ In big cities, many people use bikes to go short distances because they are cheap and faster than driving in traffic, and there are bike lanes in some areas; for example, students and office workers often cycle to work.

Multiple issues here: 'go short distance' needs plural 'short distances' (quantifier/number agreement) and is more natural. 'It's cheap' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they are cheap.' The sentence ended with 'or.' which is incomplete and should be removed. Also combine clauses properly: use a semicolon or conjunction before 'for example' and finish the sentence after 'work.' Suggestions: Use plural agreement with 'distances', ensure pronoun number matches its antecedent ('they' for 'bikes'), and avoid leaving sentences incomplete; remove trailing 'or' and punctuate the example clause correctly.