Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence variety. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past-tense consistently, and link sentences with simple connectors. Also avoid redundant phrases and limit to at most five sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g., your age or a memory) to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes. It was actually my first present — my dad gave me a red bicycle when I was eight. I practiced riding every afternoon for about a week until I felt confident, and I still remember how proud I felt when I could ride without training wheels. That bike made it much easier to visit my friends around the neighborhood.

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give clear reasons using linking words (because, therefore, so) and specific examples. Correct collocations ("not common" or "not popular"; "used to cycling"), and finish with a concise concluding statement. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Not really. Bicycles are less common in Thailand because traffic conditions and road safety are poor, so many people prefer cars or motorbikes. For example, busy highways and a lack of bike lanes make cycling risky in cities. Therefore, only a small number of people use bikes for daily travel.

× My dad gave me a bicycle to make getting around easier and I practice riding for about a week until I felt confident.

✓ My dad gave me a bicycle to make getting around easier, and I practiced riding for about a week until I felt confident.

The sentence mixes past simple with present simple. The action of practicing happened in the past, so 'practice' should be in the past tense 'practiced' to match 'gave' and 'felt'. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for events in the past (gave, practiced, felt).

× Not actually, because in Thailand roads are quite dangerous.

✓ Not really, because roads in Thailand are quite dangerous.

'Not actually' is not the natural negation here; 'Not really' or 'Not particularly' is better. Word order 'in Thailand roads' is awkward; the normal order is 'roads in Thailand'. Suggestion: use 'not really' for spoken negation and place locational phrase after the noun or before as 'roads in Thailand'.

× So people in Thailand are not usual by cycling and the road, they prefer car and.

✓ So people in Thailand are not used to cycling on the roads; they prefer cars.

Multiple errors: 'not usual by cycling' is incorrect — the correct expression is 'not used to cycling' (adjective phrase with 'used to' + verb-ing). 'and the road' is unnecessary and ungrammatical; use 'on the roads' for location. 'they prefer car and' has number and conjunction issues: use plural 'cars' and end the sentence without an extra 'and'. Suggestion: say 'not used to cycling on the roads; they prefer cars.'