Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense, number agreement, word choice and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and keep sentences concise (max 5). For example, say you had a bike, mention when you got it or who gave it to you, and why you enjoyed riding it with a clear reason and one concrete detail.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red bike my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon because my neighborhood had quiet streets and a big park nearby. I enjoyed cycling because it gave me freedom and helped me make friends in the area.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific reasons and an example using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however'). Avoid repeating words and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'not very popular', 'relatively niche').

예시: Not very popular, in my opinion. Because public transport and cars are more convenient in most cities, relatively few people use bikes for daily travel; for example, only a small number of commuters cycle to work except in a few seaside towns where cycling is more common.

× Yes, I do have a bike and still have them until now when I was a little girl.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a little girl and I still have it now.

Tense and number errors: The student mixes past and present incorrectly and uses a plural pronoun 'them' for a singular 'bike'. Use simple past 'had' for possession in childhood ('when I was a little girl') and present 'still have' for current possession. Match the singular noun 'bike' with singular pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: State past first (I had) then contrast with present (I still have it).

× I love to cycling because my my house area have a lot of area to cycling and I love to.

✓ I love cycling because there is a large area around my house for cycling, and I really enjoy it.

Incorrect verb form and several grammar issues: 'to cycling' is incorrect; after 'love' use the gerund 'cycling' or the infinitive 'to cycle' (both possible). Duplicate word 'my' removed. 'my house area' is awkward and uncountable phrasing; use 'area around my house'. 'have' is incorrect for singular 'area'; also 'there is' is needed. 'a lot of area to cycling' should be 'a large area for cycling'. The final 'I love to' is incomplete; replace with 'I really enjoy it' to be natural. Suggestion: Use 'love cycling' and 'area for cycling', and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there is'.

× Not that popular I could say.

✓ I wouldn't say they are that popular.

Awkward tense and sentence structure: The original is missing a clear subject and auxiliary verb. Use 'I wouldn't say' to express a negative opinion, and include the subject 'they' (referring to bikes) and adjective placement 'that popular'. Suggestion: Use a full clause with subject and verb for clarity.

× It's like a niche niche thing.

✓ They're more of a niche thing.

Repetition and structure: Repeating 'niche' is unnecessary. 'It's' is ambiguous; better to refer to 'bikes' with 'they're'. Use the construction 'more of a niche thing' to convey limited popularity. Suggestion: Avoid word repetition and ensure pronoun agrees with the noun being discussed.