Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., tense consistency, articles, and plural/singular forms). Mention where and why you practiced, and one brief detail about the bikes.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was young I first had a small four-wheeled balance bike, and later I upgraded to a two-wheeled bicycle. I practised riding it in my family’s garden because it was safe and quiet, and after a few weeks I could ride confidently without help.

제안: Structure your answer: give a clear opinion, then support it with two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'). Avoid vague or confusing phrases and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, double negatives). Stick to relevant points: climate and transport preferences, and give a short example if needed.

예시: I don’t think cycling is very popular in Kuwait because the climate is extremely hot, often reaching around 50°C, which makes cycling uncomfortable. Also, people usually prefer cars for convenience and air conditioning; however, some delivery workers and couriers do use bikes for short trips in quieter areas.

× Yes I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

This sentence is correct in tense but missing comma after 'Yes' for natural written form. Add a comma after interjection 'Yes' to improve punctuation and clarity.

× I had multiple bikes where at first when I was a child I I was riding the small bike with four wheels until I upgraded and got the big one with only two wheels because I was practicing in the garden where my family bring.

✓ When I was a child I had several bikes. At first I rode a small bike with four wheels until I upgraded to a larger two-wheeled bike because I was practicing in the garden my family owned.

Original sentence has structural problems, repetition ('I I'), and incorrect verb use ('bring' wrong tense and meaning). Break into two sentences for clarity, use 'had' for possession in past and 'rode' (past simple) for the action. Use 'several' instead of 'multiple' for natural phrasing. Replace 'bring' with 'owned' or 'kept' to indicate the garden belonged to the family.

× My family goes there.

✓ My family used to go there.

Context is past habit, so use past habitual form 'used to go' rather than simple present 'goes'. Present tense conflicts with surrounding past-tense narrative.

× So I just get the bike and practice there.

✓ So I would take the bike and practice there.

Context is past habitual action; use past or past habitual phrasing. 'Get' and 'practice' in present simple do not match past context. 'Would take' or 'used to take' fits better.

× Not really since Kuwaiti people, our country is really hot in climate change and our weather goes up to like 50 Celsius so we barely can bear with the weather.

✓ Not really. Our country is very hot because of climate change, and temperatures can reach around 50 degrees Celsius, so we can barely tolerate the heat.

Original mixes subjects and clauses awkwardly ('Kuwaiti people, our country') and uses 'goes up to' informally. Use clear subject 'Our country', 'temperatures can reach' and 'tolerate' instead of 'bear with'. Also add 'degrees' after Celsius for correctness.

× So we would prefer driving a car instead unless the drivers that we have we really don't really can't trust them driving a car so we give them a bike.

✓ So we prefer driving a car instead, unless the drivers we hire are people we really don't trust to drive a car, in which case we give them a bike.

Original has modal and negation problems ('don't really can't' is a double negative) and awkward phrasing. Use single modal 'prefer' for general preference. Replace 'the drivers that we have' with 'the drivers we hire' or 'the drivers we have', simplify negation to 'do not trust', and clarify consequence 'we give them a bike'.