Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la clarté et la structure de votre réponse : commencez par une phrase directe répondant à la question, puis ajoutez un ou deux détails précis et logiques en évitant les hésitations et les expressions confuses. Utilisez des mots de liaison simples (par exemple « because », « so », « and ») pour relier les idées et corrigez la grammaire (par exemple « I called it Maurice » et « it was my favourite »). Raccourcissez à au plus 3–4 phrases naturelles pour rester fluide et concise.

예시: Yes, I did — I had a bike when I was a child and I even named it Maurice because it was my favourite. It was very precious to me, so I took good care of it and rode it almost every day. I always wanted a bike, and getting Maurice made me very happy.

제안: Clarifiez vos idées et améliorez la grammaire et la cohérence : commencez par une réponse directe (« Yes, they are popular »), puis expliquez avec 2 détails précis (par exemple le terrain, le coût, et la santé). Utilisez des connecteurs logiques (« because », « and », « so ») et évitez les mots mal choisis (« sentencing », « every people »). Gardez les phrases courtes et correctes grammaticalement.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because many regions are mountainous, people often prefer bicycles for short trips and exercise. They are also affordable and better for health, so many choose them instead of cars.

× Yes, another one even I called it Maurice.

✓ Yes, I even had another one that I called Maurice.

The student used pronouns and word order incorrectly. 'Another one even I called it Maurice' is ungrammatical in English. Use 'I even had another one' to correctly place the subject and verb, and use a relative clause 'that I called Maurice' to show the name. Suggestion: Place subject and verb together (I had), and use 'that' or 'which' before the clause 'I called Maurice'.

× Maurice because was my favorite, uh, female activation.

✓ Maurice was my favorite; she was a female mascot.

The original sentence mixes fragments and incorrect words ('activation' is wrong) and misorders elements. Use a full clause 'Maurice was my favorite' and correct noun choice 'female mascot' or 'female bicycle' depending on meaning. Also include a subject for the second clause ('she'). Suggestion: Use clear nouns and standard clause order: Subject + verb + complement.

× But famous TV show, I can't do that.

✓ I can't explain that because of a famous TV show.

This fragment lacks clear connection and subject-verb structure. 'But famous TV show, I can't do that' is unclear. The corrected sentence provides a reason and proper verb. Suggestion: Use conjunctions and full clauses to connect ideas and make the intended meaning explicit.

× Why? Because it was so precious for me.

✓ Because it was so precious to me.

Preposition 'for' is not typical with 'precious' in this context; use 'to' (precious to me). Tense 'was' is acceptable if speaking about childhood; keep past tense. Suggestion: Use 'precious to me' for correct collocation.

× I always wanted a bike when I was a child.

✓ I always wanted a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'always wanted' and 'when I was a child' correctly express a past habitual desire. No change needed.

× Sentencing yes, it's popular.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular.

'Sentencing' is incorrect here. The student likely meant to say 'Saying' or simply start with 'Yes'. Also include a subject 'I think' to express opinion. Suggestion: Omit 'sentencing' and use 'Yes' or 'Yes, I think' to introduce an opinion.

× First of all it's since I'm living in the mountainous county or mountainous place.

✓ First of all, since I live in a mountainous area, they are popular.

Use simple present 'I live' for a general state rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. 'County' is likely wrong word; use 'area' and place comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: Use 'since I live' and 'mountainous area' for natural expression.

× Every people prefer bikes over cars or something else.

✓ Everyone prefers bikes to cars or other vehicles.

'Every people' is incorrect; use 'everyone' or 'everybody'. Also 'prefer X to Y' is the correct collocation, and verb must agree with singular 'everyone' so 'prefers'. Suggestion: Use 'everyone prefers' and 'prefer X to Y'.

× Festival is for health.

✓ There are bike festivals for health.

The original lacks an article and clear subject; 'Festival is for health' is vague. By adding 'There are' and plural 'bike festivals' the meaning becomes clear. Suggestion: Use 'There are' to introduce existence and specify the subject.

× Uh, it's a bit economic and cheaper to buy.

✓ It's a bit economical and cheaper to buy.

Use the adjective 'economical' rather than adverb 'economic' in this context. The comparative 'cheaper' is fine but combine with 'to buy' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'economical' to describe cost-effectiveness and ensure adjective form is correct.