Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and personal, but there are a few issues to address. First, correct small lexical/grammar errors (e.g., “write it around the neighborhood” should be “ride it around the neighborhood”). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and add one clear supporting detail using a linking word to improve coherence (for example: “because” or “so”). Also begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific details (age, who gave it, where you rode it).

예시: Yes, I did. I got a bicycle as a birthday present from my parents when I was seven, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon because there were many quiet streets near our house.

제안: Your answer gives a clear opinion and a reason, which is good, but reduce hesitation (“MMM”) and improve grammar and word choice (e.g., “famous” → “popular,” “state you are staying” → “state you live in”). Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No or It depends), then use a linking phrase (for example, however, because) and one specific detail or comparison to support your view. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: It depends on the area. In major cities like Kuala Lumpur, bicycles are less popular because the roads are busy and often unsafe for cyclists; however, in smaller towns and university areas, cycling is much more common for short trips.

× I used to write it around the neighborhood.

✓ I used to ride it around the neighborhood.

The verb 'write' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'ride' when talking about using a bike. This is not an -ing form issue per se but a word choice error involving the verb. Replace 'write' with 'ride' so the sentence correctly describes cycling around the neighborhood. Suggestion: Remember common collocations: 'ride a bike', 'ride a horse'. Use a dictionary or collocation list to check verb-noun combinations.

× it depends on which state you are staying.

✓ it depends on which state you are in.

The verb 'stay' with 'in' can be used but 'are staying' implies temporary residence and is less natural here. The correct preposition for indicating location is 'in'. Using 'are in' is more appropriate and grammatical when describing the state in which someone is located. Suggestion: Use 'in' for locations (e.g., 'I am in Kuala Lumpur'); use 'stay' with 'in' when emphasizing temporary residence: 'you are staying in Kuala Lumpur'.

× If in Kuala Lumpur, the capital of Malaysia, it's not famous and it's not popular because all the roads are highways and it's quite dangerous if you are riding a bike.

✓ If you are in Kuala Lumpur, the capital of Malaysia, cycling is neither common nor popular because many roads are highways and it is quite dangerous to ride a bike there.

Multiple issues: 'it's not famous' is incorrect use of 'famous' for a mode of transport; we should talk about 'cycling' or 'bikes' being common/popular. 'It's not popular' should be reframed to 'cycling is not common or popular'. Also 'all the roads are highways' is exaggerated; 'many roads are highways' is more natural. Finally, change 'it's quite dangerous if you are riding a bike' to 'it is quite dangerous to ride a bike there' for correct infinitive and place reference. Suggestion: Use appropriate nouns (cycling/bikes) when describing popularity, and use infinitive forms ('to ride') after expressions of danger or difficulty.