Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and finish with a brief reflection. Use linking words and correct sentence endings. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'in secondary school', 'he taught me', avoid trailing fragments).

예시: Yes. When I was in secondary school my father bought me a pink bike and taught me how to ride it. At first it was quite difficult because I kept losing my balance, but after a few weeks of practice I became confident. I still remember how proud I felt when I could ride without help.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words. Expand slightly with examples or contexts to show range of vocabulary (e.g., 'urban areas', 'short trips', 'traffic').

예시: Not really — bikes are less popular than motorbikes or cars in Vietnam. In cities people usually choose motorbikes because they are faster and better for heavy traffic, while cars are preferred for long trips or families. Bicycles are mainly used for short trips or exercise in parks.

× Yeah, when I was in my secondary school, my father bought me a pink bike and he also taught me how to ride a bike and it's kind of hard. And I was about.

✓ Yeah, when I was in secondary school, my father bought me a pink bike and he also taught me how to ride it, and it was kind of hard.

The sentence mixes present and past tense. The actions (being in school, father buying, teaching, difficulty) occurred in the past, so verbs should be past tense. Change "it's kind of hard" to "it was kind of hard" to match past time. Also remove the unnecessary article before "secondary school" and replace the second "a bike" with the pronoun "it" for clarity. The fragment "And I was about" is incomplete and unclear, so it was removed; if the speaker intended to give an age, they should use a complete phrase such as "and I was about ten".

× Well, for me it's just a way of transportation. We Vietnamese people usually use motorbike or we prefer car more than bike.

✓ Well, for me it's just a means of transportation. We Vietnamese people usually use motorbikes, or we prefer cars to bikes.

"A way of transportation" is awkward; use "a means of transportation." Count nouns require plural agreement when speaking generally: use "motorbikes" and "cars". Comparative preference should use "prefer X to Y" rather than "prefer X more than Y." Also replace "bike" with plural "bikes" to match generalization.