Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice: use past simple for past events, and avoid repetition. For example, say who gave the bike, when you got it, and one short detail about it or how you felt.

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for my seventh birthday, and I remember being very excited because it was bright red and faster than my old bike.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct phrasing and avoid repeating the same idea. Use examples or brief comparisons to make your answer more concrete.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, in my city you can see scooters, motorbikes and bicycles parked outside markets, and many people prefer them because they are cheap and easy to park.

× Yes I have a bikers actually it is a bicycle.

✓ Yes, I have a bike; actually, it is a bicycle.

Errors: 'bikers' is plural noun meaning people who ride bikes, not the object; the student intended 'bike' (singular). Missing commas for clarity. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bike' when referring to the bicycle and add commas to separate clauses.

× I purchase it purchased by my father and I given out my birthday, 7th birthday actually.

✓ I purchased it; it was bought by my father and given to me for my 7th birthday.

Errors: 'purchase' is present tense; needs past tense 'purchased'. The passive phrase 'purchased by my father' is awkwardly placed and missing auxiliary verbs. 'I given out my birthday' is incorrect; the correct passive is 'given to me for my birthday'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs and proper passive construction: 'it was bought by my father and given to me for my 7th birthday.'

× Yes, I think so because if we go out around the street, there are different types of bikes are there?

✓ Yes, I think so, because if we go out onto the street, there are different types of bikes there.

Errors: Redundant 'are' and incorrect word order. 'Around the street' is unnatural; 'onto the street' or 'on the street' is better. Remove the extra 'are' and the question mark (it's a statement). Suggestion: say 'there are different types of bikes there' or 'you can see different types of bikes on the street.'

× And I love riding the bikes.

✓ And I love riding bikes.

Error: unnecessary definite article 'the' before plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. Use 'riding bikes' for general habit. Suggestion: omit 'the' for general statements: 'I love riding bikes.'

× I think my country, in my country, people are also fond of it.

✓ I think people in my country are also fond of them.

Errors: Redundant phrase 'my country, in my country'; awkward placement of 'people'. Also 'fond of it' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I think people in my country are also fond of them' or 'People in my country also like bikes.'