Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and meaning, give a direct topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Use correct past tense and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Avoid unclear words like "shout" unless you explain them. Link ideas with a simple connector if you add details (e.g., "and").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought for me when I was eight, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Give a clearer, more confident topic sentence and support it with a specific reason and an example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "common" or "popular") and simpler grammar: avoid "probably right" and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many students and workers ride bicycles to school or to nearby jobs to save money on transport.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use the past tense 'had' instead of the present 'have'. Use past simple for completed past states. Suggestion: match the tense in the answer to the question by saying 'I had a bike.'

× No when I just shout.

✓ No. I didn't. I just shouted.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. The student likely intended to deny and then say they shouted in the past, so use negative past simple 'I didn't' and 'I just shouted' (past simple). Also add punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: use clear negative sentence structure and correct past tense verbs.

× Yes, bikes are probably right in my country in the Philippines, because whenever they go to school or work they just get a bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are probably popular in my country, the Philippines, because many people get a bike to go to school or work.

Several issues: 'right' is incorrect word choice; 'popular' is appropriate. 'In my country in the Philippines' is redundant — use 'in my country, the Philippines' or 'in the Philippines'. 'Whenever they go to school or work they just get a bike' is awkward and uses present simple appropriately for habitual actions, but 'they just get a bike' suggests immediate acquisition; 'many people get a bike to go to school or work' is clearer. Maintain present simple for general habits. Suggestion: replace 'right' with 'popular', simplify phrasing, and keep present simple for habitual facts.