Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently, avoid filler words (uh), and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say you had a pink bike, who gave it to you, and one memory or reason you loved it. Focus on correct verb forms (“had,” “was,” “taught”) and smoother linking words like “because” or “which.”

예시: I had a pink bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me and taught me how to ride, so I loved it a lot because it helped me feel independent and confident.

제안: Clarify meaning and improve vocabulary and grammar: begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then give specific reasons with linking words. Use correct adjectives (common/popular, cheap, economical) and correct verb forms. Avoid unclear phrases (“to bound the bike,” “rides in a row”). Mention where bikes are popular and give a brief reason such as traffic and cost. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities. They are a cheap and economical way to travel when roads are often congested, and many people use bikes for short trips to save time and money.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and my bike was being a pink color and I really love my bike because this bike uh fills with my father uh, who touched me to write in this bike.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. My bike was pink and I really loved it because my father taught me to ride it.

Multiple issues: 5 (Past tense issue) — 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. 21/26 (Sentence structure / passive misuse) — 'was being a pink color' is incorrect; use simple past 'was pink'. 6/5 (Present vs past tense) — 'I really love' should be past 'I really loved' to keep past reference. 26 (Incorrect verb choice/wording) — 'fills with my father' and 'who touched me to write in this bike' are ungrammatical and likely intended as 'my father taught me to ride this bike'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for childhood events; use simple adjectives ('was pink'); use correct verbs ('taught me to ride').

× To bound the bike, it's one of the most clear and cheap transport in our country, especially in my city and bike is really economic time to rides in a row because our roads always be a traffic.

✓ Overall, bikes are one of the clearest and cheapest forms of transport in our country, especially in my city. Bicycles are really economical for short trips because our roads are always congested with traffic.

6 (Present tense issue) — use present simple for general facts: 'are' not 'it's' referring to plural 'bikes'. 1/27 (Singular and plural / subject-verb agreement) — 'bike is' should be 'bikes are' or 'bicycles are'. 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) — 'to rides in a row' is incorrect; intended 'for short trips' or 'for riding short distances'. 20 (Adverb placement) — 'really economic time' is wrong; use 'really economical for'. 5/6 (Verb forms) — 'our roads always be a traffic' should be 'our roads are always congested with traffic' (be -> are, and use adjective 'congested'). Suggestion: use plural agreement for general statements, choose correct nouns ('transport' -> 'forms of transport' or 'transportation'), and use natural phrases like 'economical for short trips' and 'congested with traffic'.