Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, coherent and stick to past tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I did. It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels, and I spent hours riding around our neighborhood. For example, my father taught me to ride in the local park, and he would run alongside me until I felt confident.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then two specific reasons with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., inexpensive, convenient) and avoid invented or garbled phrases. Keep sentences short and clear.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips, so many people prefer them. For example, many students cycle to university to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Did my parents support me and I spent hours riding around the neighbors, all shorter.

✓ My parents supported me, and I spent hours riding around the neighborhood.

The original sentence mixes past-question form with a statement and has incorrect phrase 'around the neighbors, all shorter.' The student is describing a past experience, so use simple past: 'My parents supported me' and 'I spent hours riding.' 'Around the neighborhood' is the correct phrase. Also join clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and use clear noun phrases (neighborhood).

× Yes, I own a bike.

✓ Yes, I own a bike now.

The student uses present tense 'I own' which is grammatically correct, but context contrasts past and present; adding 'now' clarifies time. No strict error of tense form, but to align with the question about childhood ownership and current status, add 'now' for clarity. Suggestion: Add time markers when shifting tenses to avoid ambiguity.

× As a child I remember learning to ride in a park with my father.

✓ As a child, I remember learning to ride in a park with my father.

This sentence is correct in tense but missing a comma after the introductory phrase 'As a child'. This is punctuation rather than a grammatical tense error; punctuation improves readability. Suggestion: Use commas after introductory phrases.

× Yes, but I get quite popular in my country because they are an expensive, inexpensive and conduit way to get around conga city address.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and a convenient way to get around the city.

The original sentence has multiple problems: 'I get quite popular' is incorrect subject and verb choice for stating that bikes are popular; 'they are an expensive, inexpensive and conduit' contradicts itself and uses wrong words ('conduit' and 'conga city address'). Correct structure: subject 'bikes' and verb 'are' with clear adjectives 'inexpensive' and 'a convenient way' and correct noun 'city'. Suggestion: State the topic as the subject (bikes) and use consistent adjectives; avoid contradictory modifiers.

× For example, many students are commissioners choose cycling to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

✓ For example, many students choose cycling to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

The phrase 'are commissioners' is incorrect and unrelated; it breaks sentence structure and uses an incorrect noun. The correct structure is subject 'many students' plus verb 'choose'. Removing the spurious words yields a grammatical present simple statement about habitual action. Suggestion: Use a simple subject-verb-object structure for general facts: 'many students choose cycling.'