Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, correct articles and plurals, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Add one specific detail to enrich the answer and use a linking word if needed. For example, say you didn’t have a bike but rode a friend’s bike in the evenings and mention how often or what you enjoyed about it.

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed a friend’s bike in my village, and we rode together every evening. It was a fun way to exercise and socialise, and I especially enjoyed racing along the dirt road near our houses.

제안: Focus on clearer organisation, correct grammar and word choice, and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons (e.g., cost and convenience) with linking words (because, for example). Correct comparative and adjective forms (cheaper, more convenient). Provide a concise personal example with correct vocabulary.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people prefer them because they are cheaper to buy and easier to park, so they’re ideal for short journeys. For example, I used to ride to school with my friends because it was quicker and much cheaper than taking the bus.

× Honestly, I don't have a bike when I was a child, but yeah, one of my friend in my village, she has a bike and in the evening we both go for a run.

✓ Honestly, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but one of my friends in my village had a bike and in the evening we both used to go for a ride.

Multiple issues: article and singular/plural (friend -> friends) and tense consistency. Use past simple 'didn't have' for a past state, 'one of my friends' requires plural 'friends' after 'one of', and 'had a bike' matches past. 'Go for a run' is odd for bicycles; 'go for a ride' is more appropriate. Also 'used to go' expresses habitual past action. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct count noun forms.

× ...one of my friend in my village, she has a bike...

✓ ...one of my friends in my village had a bike...

Subject-verb agreement and noun form: 'one of' must be followed by a plural noun ('friends'). In past context, use past tense 'had' instead of 'has'. Also avoid a redundant subject pronoun ('she') when the noun phrase already includes the subject. Suggestion: write 'one of my friends had a bike' or 'she had a bike' but not both together.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child

Tense inconsistency: the time expression 'when I was a child' requires past tense. 'Don't have' is present simple; change to past simple 'didn't have'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference.

× Yes I do think so. Bikes are popular in my country most people own a bike because I think as compared to other vehicles like it's is more convenient and affordable for short journey.

✓ Yes, I do think so. Bikes are popular in my country; most people own a bike because, compared to other vehicles, they are more convenient and affordable for short journeys.

Several issues: run-on sentence and pronoun/verb agreement. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses. 'It's is' is erroneous repetition; replace with 'they are' to refer to bikes (plural). 'Short journey' should be plural or countable with an article — 'short journeys'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: split into clearer sentences and ensure pronoun agreement with plural 'bikes'.

× ...as compared to other vehicles like it's is more convenient and affordable for short journey.

✓ ...compared to other vehicles, they are more convenient and affordable for short journeys.

Preposition use: 'as compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' is sufficient. 'For short journey' needs plural or article; use 'for short journeys'. Also fix pronoun reference and verb agreement ('they are'). Suggestion: use 'compared to' and pluralize 'journeys' for general statements.

× And for example I often ride a bike with my school friends since it's quicker and cheaping than cheaper than the school man.

✓ For example, I often rode a bike with my school friends since it was quicker and cheaper than taking the school bus.

The original has multiple structural errors and unclear phrase 'cheaping than cheaper than the school man'. Use past tense 'rode' to match earlier past context. Replace 'it's quicker and cheaping' with 'it was quicker and cheaper'. 'the school man' is unclear; likely intended 'school bus' or 'school van'—use 'school bus'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun for the alternative and keep tense consistent.

× ...since it's quicker and cheaping than cheaper than the school man.

✓ ...since it was quicker and cheaper than taking the school bus.

Third person singular contraction 'it's' (it is) is inappropriate in past narrative; use 'it was'. 'Cheaping' is not a correct form; use the adjective 'cheaper'. The phrase had duplicated comparative 'cheaping than cheaper than'—remove redundancy and use 'cheaper than' with a clear comparison object. Suggestion: ensure verb forms match tense and use correct comparative adjective forms.