Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “mind peace.”

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. I loved riding it every evening after school because it helped me relax and explore my neighborhood. For example, I often rode to the park with my friends and we would race along the river path.

제안: Improve clarity, grammar, and coherence. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid fillers and unclear phrases (e.g., “transfer 11 place”, “Mary Mary”). Provide concrete examples or statistics if possible.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, many people use bikes to commute short distances, which means they do not have to wait for buses and can avoid traffic jams. As a result, bicycles are an important part of daily life for many families.

× Yes, of course, I have a bike when I was a child and I loved to ride on it during the evening when I came from the school and it is very, very mind peace.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved to ride it in the evenings when I came home from school; it was very peaceful.

This sentence mixes present tense ('I have', 'it is') with past tense ('I was', 'I loved'). Use past tense consistently because the speaker refers to childhood. 'Have' should be 'had' (past). 'Ride on it' is wordy; native usage is 'ride it.' 'During the evening when I came from the school' is unnatural; use 'in the evenings when I came home from school.' 'Mind peace' is incorrect collocation; use 'peaceful' or 'a peace of mind' depending on meaning. Suggestion: maintain past tense and use natural collocations.

× Yes, of course, bikes are very much popular as it is the mood of convenient transport for many people.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are very popular because they are a convenient mode of transport for many people.

The original uses 'are very much popular' and 'it is the mood of convenient transport' which are incorrect. Use present simple 'are' with 'very popular.' 'Very much popular' is unidiomatic. 'Mood' is wrong word; correct collocation is 'mode of transport.' Also change 'it is' to plural 'they are' to agree with 'bikes.'

× Uh, it helps us to transfer 11 place to another without any restrictions.

✓ It helps us to travel from one place to another without any restrictions.

'Transfer 11 place to another' is incorrect: 'transfer' is wrong verb for personal movement; use 'travel.' '11' appears to be a typo for 'one.' Use the phrase 'from one place to another.' Also keep pronoun 'it' referring to 'bikes' acceptable in conversational speech, but better to write 'They help us...' if referring directly to 'bikes.'

× If you have our own bike.

✓ If you have your own bike,

The sentence uses 'our' incorrectly in a conditional addressing 'you.' Use 'your' to match the second-person subject. Also this fragment is incomplete; it should connect to the next clause. Ensure it's part of a full sentence: 'If you have your own bike, you don't have to wait for public transport.'

× He doesn't have to wait for the public transport, which makes Mary Mary need delays.

✓ You don't have to wait for public transport, which avoids many unnecessary delays.

The pronoun 'He' doesn't agree with the preceding 'If you'; use 'you.' 'The public transport' should be 'public transport' (no article). 'Which makes Mary Mary need delays' is unintelligible; likely intended 'which prevents many delays' or 'which avoids many unnecessary delays.' Use a clearer verb and adjective: 'avoids many unnecessary delays.'

× So yes, it is of the quite important.

✓ So yes, it is quite important.

Phrase 'of the quite important' is ungrammatical word order and unnecessary words. Use the simple adjective phrase 'quite important.' Also 'it' refers to 'bikes' which is acceptable; alternatively 'they are quite important.'