Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct key vocabulary (bike, bag → bicycle, not ‘bag’; write → ride), use simple past for past habits, and add 1–2 specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid hesitations (uh, umm) and grammar errors (verb forms, articles, prepositions).

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about eight, and I rode it to school and to my grandparents' house almost every day. I also often went fishing with my dad on weekends and we would cycle to the river together.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then add specific reasons and examples using linking words. Correct common errors: use ‘ride a bike’, ‘popular’, ‘because it is convenient for everyone’, and pay attention to subject-verb agreement and articles. Keep answers concise (2–4 sentences) and reduce fillers.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Vietnam. For example, many students ride bikes to school and groups of friends often cycle together in the evenings. I think bikes are popular because they are cheap, easy to park, and convenient for short trips.

× Of course, uh, my dad bought a bag for me when I was agile and I usually do use it to write to my school and my grandparents house.

✓ Of course, my dad bought a bike for me when I was young and I usually used it to go to my school and my grandparents' house.

The sentence mixes incorrect vocabulary and tenses. 'Agile' is wrong for age; use 'young'. The main clause refers to a past habitual action, so use past tense 'used' rather than present 'do use'. Also 'bag' should be 'bike' to match context. Add possessive apostrophe in 'grandparents\' to show possession. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when referring to childhood events and choose correct nouns ('bike').

× Sometime I riding my bike to go fishing to win fishing with my dad too.

✓ Sometimes I rode my bike to go fishing with my dad too.

The phrase uses incorrect verb form and word choice. 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'I riding' lacks auxiliary; for past habitual use simple past 'I rode'. 'to go fishing to win fishing' is ungrammatical and unclear; remove redundant 'to win fishing' and keep 'to go fishing'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and simple past to describe repeated actions in the past and avoid redundant phrases.

× Yes, in Vietnam students usually riding by to school and uh, they often hanging out by bike with their friends and I think by is very popular because, uh, it's a convenient to everyone and it's umm, easy to do.

✓ Yes, in Vietnam students usually ride bicycles to school, and they often hang out on bikes with their friends. I think bikes are very popular because they are convenient for everyone and easy to use.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'students usually riding' should be 'students usually ride' (use base verb after adverb for habitual present). 'they often hanging out' needs 'hang out'. Preposition and noun forms: use 'ride bicycles to school' or 'ride to school'; 'on bikes' is more natural than 'by bike' in this context. 'I think by is very popular' - 'by' is wrong word; use 'bikes' and plural agreement 'bikes are'. 'it's a convenient to everyone' wrong article and adjective use; use 'they are convenient for everyone'. 'it's ... easy to do' better 'easy to use'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual general truths, correct verb forms, and appropriate nouns and prepositions.