Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verbs (have → had, write → ride) and avoid redundancy. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use simple connectors like “and” or “because.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, and I often went to the park with my cousins because we loved racing each other. Riding together was one of my favorite childhood memories.

제안: Make the answer more concise and structured: give a direct opinion, then one or two clear reasons with linking words. Correct small errors and avoid repeating words. Use vocabulary like “affordable,” “cost-effective,” or “practical.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. Mainly, gasoline is expensive, so many people choose bikes as a cost-effective way to travel, and they are also practical for short trips in busy cities.

× I do have a bike when I was a child and my father is the one who taught me to write it and it's so much fun to ride the bike with my cousins.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and my father was the one who taught me to ride it; it was so much fun to ride the bike with my cousins.

Mixing present tense 'do have' with past time expression 'when I was a child' causes a tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'had' to match 'was a child'. 'Taught me to write it' is incorrect verb choice and likely a typo; use 'taught me to ride it'. Also separate ideas into clearer clauses (use commas or a semicolon) and match past tense throughout ('was the one who taught', 'was so much fun'). Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when referring to childhood events; use 'ride' not 'write' for bicycles.

× We go in the park and sometimes.

✓ We went to the park sometimes.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes present ('go') with vague 'sometimes' at the end, creating an unfinished thought. For past context, use past tense 'went' and the correct preposition 'to' with 'park'. Place 'sometimes' where it fits the sentence ('went to the park sometimes'). Suggestion: Complete the sentence and keep tense consistent with surrounding sentences.

× I think yes, bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines especially that the the gasoline is very expensive and it's very convenient for us to ride a bike and lessen the expenses.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines, especially because gasoline is very expensive; it's very convenient for us to ride bikes and reduce expenses.

Awkward phrasing and punctuation: begin with 'Yes, I think' for clarity. 'The the' is a typo; remove extra 'the'. Use 'especially because' to introduce a reason. Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Lessen the expenses' is unidiomatic; use 'reduce expenses' or 'lower expenses'. Maintain present tense for general truths ('are popular', 'is very expensive'). Suggestion: Use 'because' to link cause and effect, use plural nouns for general statements, and choose natural collocations like 'reduce expenses'.