Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, add one or two specific supporting details, and use a linking word if you expand. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., past simple for childhood).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I always dreamed of buying one because I wanted the freedom to explore my neighborhood and visit friends more easily.

제안: Be concise and use more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'for example'). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use plural/subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people want').

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work and run errands in crowded cities.

× No, I don't have bike when I am when I am child, but still I have still I have a dream to buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I still have a dream to buy one.

Errors: incorrect tense (present 'don't have' used for past), missing article before 'bike', repeated phrase 'when I am when I am child', incorrect present tense 'am' for past, repeated 'still I have still I have', and unclear reference to 'a bike' twice. Corrections: use past simple 'didn't have' and 'was' to match the past time frame; include the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike'; remove repetitions; use 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: identify the time frame (past) and use past tense verbs; use articles with singular countable nouns; proofread to remove duplicates.

× Yes, of course, I think that bikes are very popular in my country because in modern era everyone want to have a vehicle or transport transport system.

✓ Yes, of course. I think that bikes are very popular in my country because in the modern era everyone wants to have a vehicle or a transport system.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'modern era', subject-verb agreement 'everyone want' should be 'everyone wants', repeated word 'transport'. Corrections: add 'the' for the specific time phrase, change 'want' to 'wants' because 'everyone' is singular, add 'a' before 'transport system', and remove duplicate word. Suggestion: ensure articles with specific nouns, match verb to singular indefinite pronouns, and avoid accidental repetition.

× So yes, everyone wants to have a bike or a vehicle uh by, by which he or she can travel from anywhere or to anywhere.

✓ So yes, everyone wants to have a bike or a vehicle by which they can travel from anywhere to anywhere.

Errors: wordy and hesitations ('uh, by, by'), awkward 'he or she' phrasing, and redundant 'from anywhere or to anywhere'. Corrections: remove hesitations, use singular 'they' for gender-neutral reference, and simplify to 'from anywhere to anywhere'. Suggestion: avoid filler words, use concise prepositional phrases, and prefer singular 'they' for inclusive, natural speech.