Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 중복이 있습니다. 주제문을 명확히 하고 추가 정보를 연결어로 매끄럽게 이어야 합니다. 또한 문장 수를 줄여 간결하게 말하세요. 예를 들어 과거 경험을 말할 때는 한 문장에 핵심을 담고, 두 번째 문장에서 구체적 디테일(누가, 언제, 어떻게)을 연결어(such as, and, so)를 사용해 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child, and my father taught me how to ride it when I was about seven, so I learned very quickly.

제안: 답변이 반복적이고 어색한 표현(‘public bike bicycle’, ‘we in Seoul, which is capital city’)이 있습니다. 주제문으로 바로 의견을 말한 뒤 구체적인 예시를 연결어(for example, for instance)로 자연스럽게 제시하세요. 불필요한 단어는 줄이고 도시 이름과 서비스 특징을 정확히 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. For example, Seoul has a public bike-sharing system called 'Seoul Bike', which makes it easy for many people to rent bikes for short trips.

× Yes, I had. When I was a child. I had a bike and my father taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had a bike, and my father taught me how to ride it.

The student used 'Yes, I had.' as a response to a yes/no question; English prefers 'Yes, I did.' when confirming past possession or actions (support verb do for short answers). Also the original contained sentence fragments ('When I was a child.'), so combine clauses into one sentence with proper commas. Repeating 'bike' is unnecessary; replace the second 'bike' with the pronoun 'it' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: use short answers with do-support for past simple (Yes, I did) and combine fragments into complete sentences.

× Yes, I think so. For example, we in Seoul, which is capital city, we have a public bike bicycle in the city, so every citizen can ride the bike.

✓ Yes, I think so. For example, in Seoul, which is the capital city, we have a public bicycle system in the city, so every citizen can ride a bike.

Errors include missing definite article before 'capital city' (use 'the capital city'), redundant and incorrect word choice 'public bike bicycle' (use 'public bicycle system' or 'public bikes'), and awkward repetition of 'we' and 'in the city'. Also 'the bike' at the end implies a specific bike; more natural is 'a bike' or 'bikes'. Suggestions: include 'the' before unique nouns like 'capital city', avoid redundant words, and choose correct nouns ('bicycle' or 'bike') and quantifiers ('a bike' for general statement).