Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense and count nouns) and avoid incomplete sentences. Link ideas with simple connectors if needed.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My first bike was a small red tricycle that I got in primary school. I rode it every day around my neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and made going to friends’ houses very easy.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with clear grammar. Reduce filler words ('uh') and use linking words (because, so, therefore) to connect reasons. Use accurate verbs (ride, learn to ride) and short, complete sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, children often learn to ride bikes at a young age, and many people use them to travel short distances to school or markets because they are faster than walking and cheaper than public transport.

× My first bike was when I was on primary school.

✓ My first bike was when I was in primary school.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'school' to indicate being enrolled at that level. 'On primary school' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'in primary school.' Also the sentence is clearer as 'My first bike was when I was in primary school.' Suggestion: Use 'in primary school' to talk about being at a school level.

× It has 2 bike wheels and three wheels in total.

✓ It had two wheels, and three wheels in total when it was a tricycle.

Number words in formal writing are usually written out as words ('two'). Also the original mixes present tense 'has' with past context; match tense to narrative (past). The sentence is also unclear: if the first bike had two wheels, total three wheels indicates a tricycle. Clarify by specifying 'when it was a tricycle.' Suggestion: Match tense and write numbers as words in formal responses; clarify which vehicle you're describing.

× And then I used to.

✓ And then I used to ride it more often.

'Used to' requires a verb to complete the meaning. 'I used to' alone is incomplete. Provide the habitual action: 'I used to ride it more often.' Suggestion: Always follow 'used to' with the base form of a verb to indicate past habitual actions.

× Uh, first it is cheap.

✓ Uh, first, they are cheap.

When talking about bikes in general, use a plural subject 'they' and present simple 'are.' 'It is cheap' refers to a singular item and is less natural when speaking of bikes as a category. Suggestion: Use plural subject and verb agreement when describing general facts about a category.

× So most people, they use uh, they learn to write bike first, then they will you write back to go to school or walk.

✓ So most people learn to ride a bike first; then they use it to go to school or instead of walking.

Original has multiple pronoun errors and incorrect verbs: 'write bike' should be 'ride a bike.' 'They will you write back' is ungrammatical. Also redundant pronoun 'they' after 'most people' is unnecessary. Correct structure: 'Most people learn to ride a bike first; then they use it to go to school or instead of walking.' Suggestion: Use the correct verb 'ride' with 'a bike,' avoid redundant pronouns, and structure the sentence to show sequence and purpose.