Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: avoid contradictory words (bike vs bicycle) and incomplete reasoning. Start with a direct topic sentence, give one clear reason with a brief supporting detail, and finish without trailing fragments. Use linking words if you add a second reason. Also avoid mentioning gender as an unexplained justification — if you do, clarify how it affected choice. Keep answer to under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I had a balance bicycle at first because I wasn't confident riding on two wheels. Later, my parents waited until I was older and took lessons, so I learned to ride safely.

제안: Make the response more structured and avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Open with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'for example'). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'status symbol', 'convenient', 'environmentally friendly') and correct grammar. End with a concise concluding remark. Avoid filler phrases like 'that's a great question' in the exam.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many men buy expensive bikes as a status symbol, and others use them for commuting because they are cheaper and more convenient than cars. As a result, you often see a wide range of bicycles on city streets.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but instead I had a bicycle because I was not quite confident riding a bike and because I'm a girl and.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child; instead I had a bicycle because I was not very confident riding one and because I was a girl.

The original sentence has article and pronoun repetition issues and an incomplete ending. 'Riding a bike' and 'a bicycle' are repetitive; use 'one' to avoid repetition. 'I'm a girl and.' is incomplete and mixes present with past context; change to 'I was a girl' to match past tense. Also replace 'not quite confident' with 'not very confident' for naturalness and use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses correctly.

× I think bikes are really popular in my country, especially among men, because they see bike as a status symbol and they think that if they ride a bike, it will boost their personality.

✓ I think bicycles are really popular in my country, especially among men, because they see a bicycle as a status symbol and they think that if they ride one, it will boost their image.

The sentence mixes plural and singular forms awkwardly: 'they see bike' is incorrect; it needs an article with the singular noun ('a bicycle') or use the plural 'bicycles'. Also 'ride a bike' can be made concise as 'ride one'. 'Boost their personality' is not a typical collocation; use 'boost their image' or 'boost their status'. Adjusting articles and noun forms fixes the singular/plural and article usage.

× That's why I think popular bikes are they're in.

✓ That's why I think popular bikes are in fashion.

The original is ungrammatical and contains redundant words 'are they're'. The intended meaning is that certain bikes are fashionable; restructure to 'popular bikes are in fashion' or 'those bikes are in fashion'. This corrects the sentence structure and removes redundancy.