Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar while keeping a clear structure: start with a direct topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and finish with a brief concluding remark. Reduce filler words (“umm,” “like”) and correct verb forms (e.g., “gave me a bike”). Aim for 3–4 sentences total.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike until I was ten. I wanted one because my friends used to ride around the neighborhood, so I asked my parents, but they couldn't afford it at the time. Eventually my uncle gave me a second‑hand bike, and I rode it everywhere until I was older.

제안: Answer directly, use linking words to show contrast and cause, and include one specific example or statistic if possible. Remove excessive hesitations and avoid repetition. Keep to 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “public transport,” “during the COVID‑19 pandemic,” “regained popularity”).

예시: They were more popular in the past, but their use declined as public transport improved and more people started taking buses. However, during the COVID‑19 pandemic many people avoided crowded buses, so cycling became more common again. Today cycling is gradually regaining popularity, especially for short urban trips.

× Umm, well, honestly, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike until I was like 10 years old.

✓ Umm, well, honestly, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike until I was about 10 years old.

Use 'about' instead of 'like' in formal speech; 'like' is colloquial and not a tense error but improves accuracy. The past tense 'didn't have' is correct for describing a past lack; change is stylistic to fit speaking test register.

× Like whenever I saw my friends riding their bikes, I've always wanted to have a bike.

✓ Whenever I saw my friends riding their bikes, I always wanted to have a bike.

Mixing past simple 'saw' with present perfect 'I've always wanted' is inconsistent. Use past simple 'I always wanted' to keep the past-time reference consistent. Ensure tense consistency within the same time frame.

× So I asked my parents to buy me a bike, but they didn't have enough money to do it.

✓ So I asked my parents to buy me a bike, but they didn't have enough money to do so.

The verbs and tenses are correct, but using 'to do so' is more natural than 'to do it' in this context. This is a clarity/style improvement rather than a core tense error.

× But yeah, my my uncle give me a bike.

✓ But yeah, my uncle gave me a bike.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'uncle' (singular past action) requires past simple 'gave', not present 'give'. Also remove the duplicated 'my'. Use past simple because the event occurred in the past.

× Umm, well, they used to be very popular in the past, but umm, since like bus systems have been improved a lot.

✓ Umm, well, they used to be very popular in the past, but since the bus systems have improved a lot,

Use 'have improved' (present perfect) correctly with 'since' to indicate change up to now; remove 'been' and 'have been improved' passive is possible but 'have improved' is more natural. Also replace 'like' with a pause or 'such as' in formal speech and add 'the' before 'bus systems' for specificity.

× Umm, a lot of people prefer umm taking buses rather than bikes.

✓ Umm, a lot of people prefer taking buses rather than riding bikes.

After 'prefer', use the -ing form 'taking' (correct) but parallel structure requires 'riding bikes' or 'using bikes' rather than just 'bikes'. This keeps verb forms parallel.

× So they're not as popular as before anymore.

✓ So they're not as popular as they used to be.

'As before anymore' is awkward and redundant. Use 'as they used to be' to express a decline from past popularity. This fixes sentence structure and idiomatic usage.

× But since COVID period, I think they're like gradually umm, getting popular again.

✓ But since the COVID period, I think they're gradually becoming popular again.

Use 'since the COVID period' with 'since' and 'period' or simply 'since COVID'. 'Getting popular' is informal; 'becoming popular' is more appropriate. Maintain present continuous 'are becoming' or present progressive 'are gradually becoming' to indicate an ongoing trend.