Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense and repetition. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small pronunciation/word errors (e.g., “two” not “A2”) and simplify: 'Yes, I had a Spider-Man bike' followed by a detail about its appearance or how you used it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a Spider-Man themed bicycle with small training wheels at the back, and I used to ride it around the park every weekend. Because it was sturdy and comfortable, I learned to balance quickly and felt very proud of it.

제안: Give a clearer topic sentence and add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases and improve grammar: use 'more popular' or 'widely used' and correct comparative structures. For example, say why they are popular (cost, convenience, health) and give a short example or result.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than scooters and cars. In addition, many people use them for short trips to work or school, so they help save money and reduce traffic congestion.

× Yes, I do have AI do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

Student used present tense 'do have' while the question asked about childhood (past). Use simple past 'had' to match time reference. Also remove repeated words and extraneous 'AI'. Suggestion: listen for time markers (when you were a child) and use past tense verbs accordingly.

× When I was a child it was it was a Spider-Man bike and it has A2 backup wheels at the back of it.

✓ When I was a child, it was a Spider-Man bike and it had two backup wheels on the back.

Problems: repetition 'it was it was', present 'has' used with past context, and 'A2' likely intended 'two'. Use simple past 'was' and 'had' to match 'When I was a child'. Remove duplicate words and use 'on the back' or 'at the back' consistently. Suggestion: proofread aloud to catch repetitions and ensure verb tense matches time frame.

× Yes, it really is popular because it's a lot cheaper that compared to compared to scooters or other expensive stuff.

✓ Yes, they are really popular because they are much cheaper compared to scooters or other expensive options.

Problems: subject-verb mismatch and tense/form: 'it' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use plural 'they are'. Repetition 'compared to compared to' and awkward 'a lot cheaper that compared to'. Use 'much cheaper compared to' or 'cheaper than' and replace vague 'stuff' with 'options' or 'items'. Suggestion: identify the noun's number (singular/plural) to choose correct pronoun and verb, and avoid repeated phrases.