Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: The answer does not respond to the question. Give a direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two brief supporting details (age, how you used it or a memory). Keep it natural and concise, use linking words if you add details, and stay within 3–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was seven and rode it to visit my friend next door almost every day. Because the streets near our house were quiet, I learned to ride quickly and felt very confident.

제안: The answer addresses the question but is disfluent and repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, for instance, also). Avoid filler sounds and repeated words, and choose more precise vocabulary (cyclists, cycling, commute, recreation). Keep the total to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and short trips. For example, commuters often cycle to work in the mornings, and families go cycling on weekend trails for recreation.

× Hey, I want to practice aisles speaking with you.

✓ Hey, I want to practice English speaking with you.

The student likely meant 'English speaking' but wrote 'aisles', which is an incorrect word choice causing a sentence structure/meaning error. Replace 'aisles' with 'English' to convey the intended meaning. Also keep the present simple 'want' because this is a present desire. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and reread sentences for unintended words.

× Yeah, bicyclists are popular in my country because of, because most people use bicycle for their exercises, for their fitness, uh, even to, uh, uh, go for a trail hiking.

✓ Yeah, bicycles are popular in my country because most people use bicycles for exercise and fitness, and even to go hiking on trails.

Multiple issues: 'bicyclists are popular' is odd (people are not 'popular' in general); 'use bicycle' should be plural 'use bicycles' or 'use a bicycle' per context (article/number error). 'for their exercises' should be 'for exercise' (uncountable) and 'trail hiking' is unnatural; 'hiking on trails' is correct. Also remove filler 'because of, because' and unnecessary filler sounds. Suggestions: choose correct noun forms and articles ('bicycles' or 'a bicycle'), use uncountable noun 'exercise', and prefer natural collocations like 'hiking on trails'.