Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct tense and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words ("uh"). For example, use past tense consistently: "I had a bike when I was a child." Then add a supporting detail with a linking phrase like "Often" or "On weekends."

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was a pupil, and often my friends and I rode it together on weekends when the weather was nice.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Use comparative language correctly (e.g., "more popular in X than in Y") and provide one or two concise reasons why.

예시: They are popular in some areas but not others. For example, in Chongqing bikes are less common because the roads are hilly and crowded, whereas in Jiangsu cycling is more popular due to flatter terrain and better bike lanes.

× Yes, I have, uh, when I was a pupil, I, my parents give me a bike and they usually rode my bike with my friend in the weekends, uh, when the weather is good.

✓ Yes. When I was a pupil, my parents gave me a bike, and they usually rode bikes with my friend on weekends when the weather was good.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'I have' is inappropriate for a past context; use past tense 'When I was a pupil'. 'My parents give me a bike' should be past simple 'gave' to match the past time frame. 'They usually rode my bike with my friend' is awkward and likely incorrect in meaning; correct to 'they usually rode bikes with my friend' or 'they rode my bike with my friend' depending on intended meaning; here 'rode bikes with my friend' is clearer. Use 'on weekends' (correct preposition) rather than 'in the weekends'. Suggestions: keep past-simple consistently for past events, choose correct subject for 'ride' (bikes) and use 'on' with weekend time expressions.

× Actually, it's different among different cities. In my home, Chongqing and the road is, uh, very, is not, uh, suitable for a riding bike. And in Jiangsu it's more suitable.

✓ Actually, it differs between cities. In my hometown, Chongqing, the roads are not suitable for riding bikes. In Jiangsu, they are more suitable.

Preposition and word choice issues: 'different among different cities' is awkward; use 'differs between cities'. 'In my home' should be 'In my hometown'. 'The road is ... suitable for a riding bike' has several problems: use plural 'roads' and the structure 'suitable for riding bikes' or 'suitable for cycling'. 'For a riding bike' is incorrect. Also subject-verb agreement: 'the road is' versus plural 'roads are'. Suggestions: use 'between' for comparisons of two or more items, use 'hometown' for the place you come from, use plural 'roads' if referring generally, and say 'suitable for riding bikes' or 'suitable for cycling'.