Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'taught', 'fell off') and avoid redundant phrasing like 'alone' repeated. Mention a brief reason and a short example to make it natural.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. I never learned to ride because no one taught me, and I was afraid of falling off. For example, the one time I tried, I lost balance and injured my knee, so my parents decided to wait until I was older.

제안: Start with a clear, concise topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example') and more precise vocabulary (use 'ride' rather than 'drive' for bikes). Add a specific example or brief comparison to support your point.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children learn to ride early. For example, parents often teach their kids at age five or six, and cycling is common as both transport and a hobby, especially in cities with good bike lanes.

× No one has teached me how to ride it and I used to feel so scared of being alone, driving it alone, I always fell out.

✓ No one taught me how to ride it, and I used to feel so scared of being alone riding it; I always fell off.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('has teached') with past habitual context. 'Teached' is incorrect past tense; correct past tense is 'taught'. Use simple past 'taught' because the action happened in the past. 'Fell out' is not the correct verb for dismounting a bike; use 'fell off'. Also combine clauses with appropriate punctuation or conjunctions to avoid run-on sentences. Suggestion: use 'No one taught me how to ride it, and I used to feel so scared of being alone riding it; I always fell off.'

× Their parents often teach them how to ride the bike.

✓ Their parents often teach them how to ride a bike.

The original sentence is mostly correct for verb agreement ('teach' matches plural subject 'parents'). However the article 'the' before 'bike' implies a specific bike; general statements should use 'a bike' or no article. This falls under article/usage but here corrected to 'a bike' for natural generalization. Suggestion: use 'a' for general habits: 'teach them how to ride a bike.'

× So yes, I actually think there is a lot of people who are interested in driving bikes and the sports that include riding it.

✓ So yes, I actually think there are a lot of people who are interested in riding bikes and the sports that include riding them.

'There is a lot of people' has a subject-verb agreement problem: 'people' is plural so use 'there are'. 'Driving bikes' is unnatural; 'riding bikes' is correct. 'The sports that include riding it' uses singular 'it' for plural 'bikes' and is awkward; replace with 'riding them' or 'that include bike riding.' Suggestion: 'there are a lot of people who are interested in riding bikes and the sports that include riding them.'

× Bikes are so popular in my country, a lot of people actually grow up having a bike.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country; a lot of people actually grow up with a bike.

'Grow up having a bike' is awkward. Use 'grow up with a bike' to express possession during childhood. Also 'so popular' is acceptable conversationally but 'very popular' is more formal. Replace comma with semicolon or period to avoid comma splice. Suggestion: 'Bikes are very popular in my country; a lot of people actually grow up with a bike.'

× I used to feel so scared of being alone, driving it alone, I always fell out.

✓ I used to feel so scared of being alone riding it; I always fell off.

The phrase 'scared of being alone, driving it alone' repeats 'alone' and creates a run-on. 'Driving' is also less natural than 'riding' for bikes. 'Fell out' is incorrect prepositional choice; the correct phrasal verb is 'fell off'. Use 'riding it' and 'fell off' instead. Suggestion: 'I used to feel so scared of being alone riding it; I always fell off.'