Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words ("umm") and ensure verb agreement and pronouns match (e.g., "it" not "them").

예시: Yes. I had a pink bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it to the park with my friends, and sometimes they asked to borrow it because it was sturdy and easy to ride.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct tense and phrasing. Remove repetitions and fillers, and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many children ride to parks for fun, and families often use bikes to run quick errands to nearby shops.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike which is the color pink.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike which was pink.

The clause 'which is the color pink' mixes present-tense 'is' with a past-time context ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'was' to match the time frame. Also 'the color pink' is wordy; 'pink' is a concise adjective describing the bike. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with the time reference (past with past).

× I used them going to the park with my friends and play with them and some of my friends wants to umm, borrow my bike.

✓ I used it to go to the park with my friends and play with them, and some of my friends wanted to, um, borrow my bike.

The singular noun 'a bike' requires singular pronoun 'it', not 'them'. Also maintain past tense consistency: 'used' and 'wanted' should both be past. 'Used to' + base verb requires 'to go' (infinitive), and 'wants' should be 'wanted' for past. Remove filler 'umm' or keep as 'um' but place it naturally. Suggestion: match pronoun number to its noun and keep consistent past tense verbs.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present simple 'are' is appropriate for a general truth about current popularity. No change needed.

× We used to umm, use our bikes to play with our friends and when our parents ask us to buy something we use those bikes to umm go to the stores and make it make it fast to go there.

✓ We used to use our bikes to play with our friends, and when our parents asked us to buy something we used those bikes to go to the stores to get there faster.

Several issues: 'used to' already expresses past habitual action, so follow with base verb 'use' (correct). 'Ask' should be past 'asked' to match 'used to'. 'We use' should be 'we used' for past. 'Make it make it fast to go there' is awkward; use 'to get there faster' or 'to go there more quickly'. Also remove extra filler repetitions and keep consistent past tense. Suggestion: ensure tense consistency and use natural phrasing for speed ('faster').

× ...and some of my friends wants to umm, borrow my bike.

✓ ...and some of my friends wanted to, um, borrow my bike.

The plural subject 'some of my friends' requires the plural verb 'want' in present or 'wanted' in past. Because context is past (when I was a child), use past 'wanted'. Also punctuation and fillers should be handled smoothly. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and matches overall tense.