Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid inaccuracies and unclear phrases (e.g., “taught me how to write it” is likely wrong). Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 3–4 sentences. Improve vocabulary accuracy (e.g., “small saddlebag” or “children’s handlebar bag”).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small children’s bike with a colorful handlebar bag that I loved. My mother taught me how to ride it in the park when I was about six, and I practiced with her help until I could ride on my own.

제안: Answer directly, then add concise, specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary errors (“Bike”→“bicycles”, “eBags” likely meant “e-bikes” or “electric bikes”). Avoid fillers like “uh”. Provide concrete examples or comparisons. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary such as “convenient”, “cost-effective”, and “environmentally friendly”.

예시: Yes, bicycles used to be one of the most popular ways to get around in China. However, in recent years electric bikes have become more common because they are convenient, cheaper than cars, and more environmentally friendly. For example, many commuters use e-bikes to avoid traffic and save time on short trips.

× Yes, I did, and I remembered I had a tiny bag designed for children and my mother taught me how to write it.

✓ Yes, I did, and I remember I had a tiny bag designed for children, and my mother taught me how to ride it.

The student used 'remembered' which places the act of remembering in the past, but the context is a past experience being recalled in the present conversation; 'I remember' is more natural. Also 'write it' is incorrect for using a bike; the intended verb is 'ride.' Use 'remember' for present recollection and 'ride' for operating a bicycle. Suggestion: say 'I remember I had...' and 'taught me how to ride it.'

× Yes, of course Bike uh was the most popular traveling mode in China, but now I think eBags are becoming more popular because it is convenient and uh energy saving.

✓ Yes, of course bikes were the most popular mode of travel in China, but now I think e-bikes are becoming more popular because they are convenient and energy-saving.

Multiple issues fall under plural and related noun forms: 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, and 'traveling mode' is better as 'mode of travel.' 'eBags' is likely a typo for 'e-bikes' and should be plural to match 'are.' Pronouns and verbs must agree: 'it is' should be 'they are' to match plural 'e-bikes.' 'Energy saving' used as an adjective should be hyphenated 'energy-saving.' Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to general categories, ensure subject-verb agreement, correct typos, and hyphenate compound adjectives.