Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and keep tense consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid contradictions (e.g., saying it has no engine but works on a battery) and reduce unnecessary words.

예시: Yes—I had a small plastic bike as a child. It was a birthday gift from my parents and ran on a small battery rather than an engine, which made it easy and safe for me to learn to ride.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence, improve grammar and word choice, and link supporting points logically. Replace vague phrases with specific examples and avoid filler words. Limit to 3–4 sentences with linking words such as 'also' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. They are practical for navigating narrow streets and areas where larger vehicles cannot go. Also, a variety of models—from commuter bikes to sportier designs—appeal to different tastes, which increases their popularity.

× I do have a small bike which is made-up of plastic.

✓ I had a small bike which was made of plastic.

The phrase 'made-up of' is incorrect for describing materials. Use 'made of' and match past tense because the student is talking about a childhood object. Also 'do have' is present tense and unnecessary; change to past 'had' to fit the time frame. Suggestion: Use 'made of' for materials and keep the past tense: 'I had a small bike which was made of plastic.'

× When I was a child it was a gift from my parents during my birthday and it doesn't have an engine at all, but it works on some battery which is very helpful for me at that time when I just started walking.

✓ When I was a child it was a gift from my parents for my birthday and it didn't have an engine at all, but it worked on a battery which was very helpful to me at that time when I was just learning to ride.

The sentence mixes past and present forms. Use past tense consistently (was, didn't have, worked) because the event occurred in the past. 'During my birthday' is unnatural; use 'for my birthday.' 'Some battery' is vague; use 'a battery.' 'Started walking' is likely incorrect for bike context; 'learning to ride' is clearer. Also use 'helpful to me' not 'for me.'

× Most of the people uses bikes.

✓ Most people use bikes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'use' not 'uses.' Also 'Most of the people' is wordy; 'Most people' is natural. Suggestion: 'Most people use bikes.'

× It also helps, uh, to go the places where the big vehicle is not allowed to enter and narrow roads.

✓ It also helps to go to places where large vehicles are not allowed to enter and where the roads are narrow.

Preposition and article issues: say 'go to places' not 'go the places.' 'Big vehicle' should be 'large vehicles' and plural agreement matters. Also separate ideas with 'and where' to clarify 'narrow roads.' Use 'are not allowed' for passive construction. Suggestion: 'It also helps to go to places where large vehicles are not allowed to enter and where the roads are narrow.'

× We can use the bikes easily.

✓ We can use bikes easily.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'bikes' when speaking generally. Simplify structure to 'We can use bikes easily.' This improves naturalness and generality.

× And there are different modes of bikes or types of bikes in which the young people are attracted to.

✓ And there are different models or types of bikes that attract young people.

Awkward adjective/noun choice and preposition: 'modes of bikes' is wrong; use 'models.' The relative clause should be 'that attract young people' rather than 'in which the young people are attracted to.' Avoid ending with redundant preposition 'to.' Suggestion: 'And there are different models or types of bikes that attract young people.'