Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, use correct tense and grammar, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 clear sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I had a bike as a child), then add a reason or detail using linking words (however, because, so) and finish with a short consequence or memory.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, my parents were worried about my safety, so they often told me not to ride near busy roads. As a result, I mostly rode in our quiet neighborhood park with my friends.

제안: Give a clear, direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or a brief comparison using linking words. Reduce hesitations and organize ideas: state whether bikes are popular now, then explain trends (e.g., urban car ownership, safety concerns, public transport). Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use appropriate vocabulary (cars, ownership, preference, urban areas).

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country nowadays. Although many children still ride bikes, most adults prefer cars because of convenience and longer commutes. Consequently, bicycle use is more common in rural areas or among people who cycle for exercise.

× Yes, absolutely. Uh, I do have a bike and my, I do had a bike in my childhood.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I had a bike in my childhood.

The student mixes present and past tense incorrectly ('I do have' and 'I do had'). The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so past tense should be used. Use 'I had' to indicate possession in the past. Remove unnecessary filler 'do' in past statement and redundant phrasing to make the sentence clear. Suggestion: Use simple past 'had' for past possessions and avoid inserting 'do' before past verbs.

× Uh, but I believe uh, my parents aren't happy me to ride a bicycle during those days because they are like more scared that I might hit someone or.

✓ But I believe my parents were not happy for me to ride a bicycle then because they were more afraid that I might hit someone.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'aren't happy me to ride' is incorrect structure; after 'happy' use 'happy for me to' or 'didn't want me to'. Also the time frame is past, so use past tense 'were' and 'were more afraid' instead of present 'aren't' and 'are'. 'Scared' is acceptable but 'afraid' fits better. The trailing 'or' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: Use 'were not happy for me to' or 'didn't want me to' and keep verbs in past tense for past situations.

× Not much, I mean, uh, during childhood memories, I, I can recall as per now that, uh, children only, you know, ride the bicycles, but right now everyone, uh, you know, change their vehicle to four Wheeler cars bike rather than uh.

✓ Not really. From my childhood memories I recall that children used to ride bicycles, but now many people have changed to four-wheel cars instead of bikes.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: 'Not much' is better as 'Not really'. 'During childhood memories' is unnatural; use 'From my childhood memories'. 'I can recall as per now' is incorrect and awkward—use 'I recall'. For past habitual action use 'used to ride'. 'Right now everyone...change their vehicle' mixes present with incorrect infinitive; use 'now many people have changed to four-wheel cars' or 'now many people use cars instead of bikes'. 'Four Wheeler cars bike' is garbled; correct to 'four-wheel cars' or 'cars instead of bikes'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' for past habits and 'now' with present perfect or simple present for current trends; simplify phrasing and choose clear nouns ('cars' and 'bikes').