Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (uh, umm) and avoid unrelated information. Use linking words (so, but, because) to make the response coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I preferred indoor activities, so I spent most of my free time drawing cartoons and painting cute characters at home. Because I wasn’t into outdoor activities, my parents never bought me a bicycle.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating phrases and hesitations. Use linking words like however or therefore to connect ideas. If unsure, state that clearly and provide an observation or general impression.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, I rarely see people cycling on the streets because most people prefer cars or public transport, especially in busy cities. However, bikes are more common in parks and rural areas where traffic is lighter.

× Uh, when I was a child, I don't like uh, the outdoor activities, umm, just like you said, umm, I don't have a bike, umm uh, but I like umm, painting at home. I like draw cartoons, umm, all kinds of cute.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, I didn't like outdoor activities. I didn't have a bike, but I liked painting at home. I liked to draw cartoons and all kinds of cute things.

Multiple tense errors: the speaker sets the time frame as 'when I was a child' (past), so verbs describing habits in that period should be in the past tense. 'I don't like' and 'I don't have' should be 'I didn't like' and 'I didn't have'. Also 'I like draw cartoons' is incorrect verb pattern: use 'liked to draw' or 'liked drawing'. Additionally add a noun after 'cute' ('things') to complete the phrase. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct verb patterns for preferences (like + -ing or like + to + verb).

× I like draw cartoons, umm, all kinds of cute.

✓ I liked drawing cartoons and all kinds of cute things.

The structure 'like draw' is ungrammatical; after 'like' use the gerund ('drawing') or 'to' infinitive ('to draw'). Also because the sentence refers to childhood, use past 'liked'. 'All kinds of cute' is incomplete; add a noun such as 'things'. Suggestion: use 'liked drawing cartoons' or 'liked to draw cartoons' and include the object after 'cute'.

× Umm, in my country, uh, I don't know, but umm, I don't usually see people saw people ride a bike going out.

✓ In my country, I don't know, but I don't usually see people riding bikes when they go out.

This sentence mixes present and past ('don't usually see' with 'saw people') and repeats 'people'. Use a consistent present-tense habit description: 'I don't usually see people riding bikes'. Use the gerund 'riding' after 'see' when describing an ongoing action. Also use plural 'bikes' for general statements. Suggestion: say 'I don't usually see people riding bikes when they go out' or 'I don't often see people riding bicycles.'