Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, correct tense and word order (e.g., “he stayed with me while I practiced”), and replace ambiguous phrases like “in my the bike” with clear descriptions. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My grandfather bought the bike for me when I was small, and he stayed with me while I practiced riding. He was very enthusiastic and proud when I finally rode on my own, which made the experience unforgettable.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and support it with specific, coherent reasons. Correct informal contractions and word choices (e.g., use “because” instead of ‘‘cause”, and “cheap” or “environmentally friendly” instead of “shape”). Use linking words like “also” or “for example” to organize details. Keep the response concise (max five sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Almost every child owns a bike for play and recreation, and many adults use bicycles for short commutes or exercise because they are affordable and convenient. For example, people often bike to nearby shops or parks to avoid traffic and save money.

× My grandfather bought it for me and I vividly remember him stayed in my the bike where I practiced, helpful, very enthusiastic and proud when I finally rode on my own.

✓ My grandfather bought it for me, and I vividly remember him staying near the bike where I practiced; he was helpful, very enthusiastic, and proud when I finally rode on my own.

The sentence contains several tense and structure problems. 'I vividly remember him stayed' incorrectly uses the past tense 'stayed' after 'remember'; English requires the -ing form (gerund) after 'remember' when recalling an action: 'remember him staying'. Also 'in my the bike' is incorrect word order and articles; it should be 'near the bike' or 'by the bike'. The clause describing the grandfather's attitude needs a verb and matching tense: use 'he was helpful, very enthusiastic, and proud'. Use punctuation or conjunctions to separate ideas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'remember him staying near the bike' and a clear main clause with 'he was'.

× Is yes.

✓ Yes, it is.

'Is yes.' is ungrammatical word order for a short affirmative response. In English the verb and subject word order for a short answer is 'Yes, it is' or simply 'Yes'. Reorder to 'Yes, it is.' or just 'Yes.'.

× and others also cycle and for short commute or exercise 'cause it's very shape and convenient.

✓ and others also cycle for short commutes or for exercise because it's very cheap and convenient.

Several issues: 'and for short commute' misuses preposition and lacks plural 'commutes' when speaking generally — use 'for short commutes'. The slang ''cause' should be 'because'. 'very shape' is incorrect; likely intended 'very cheap'. Also repeat preposition 'for' before 'exercise' for parallelism: 'for short commutes or for exercise'. Ensure adjective 'cheap' instead of 'shape'. Use plural when speaking generally.