Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, fluency and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, avoid redundancy, and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words appropriately and provide a brief specific reason or example. For instance, replace incorrect words ("bite" → "buy") and unnecessary fillers. Aim to say: I didn’t have a bike as a child because I preferred indoor activities. My parents thought it wasn’t necessary, so they never bought one; I often read or played video games instead.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I preferred indoor activities. My parents thought it wasn’t necessary, so they never bought one; instead I spent a lot of time reading and playing video games.

제안: Improve grammar, vocabulary and coherence: begin with a direct answer, correct word choices and sentence structure, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds. Use terms like "not very popular" and explain why with concise details (e.g. narrow roads, lack of bike lanes, reliance on public transport).

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in Hong Kong because the roads are narrow and there are few dedicated bike lanes. For that reason, people usually use public transport or cars for their daily commute.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because I wasn't engaging in any outdoor activities.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because I didn't engage in any outdoor activities.

The sentence uses past continuous 'wasn't engaging' which implies a specific ongoing action; the general habitual past is better expressed with simple past 'didn't engage'. Use simple past for repeated/persistent states in the past.

× I was a quite sedentary person though, so therefore my parents didn't bite me a bike.

✓ I was quite a sedentary person, so my parents didn't buy me a bike.

There are word choice and sentence structure errors: 'bite' is a wrong word; correct verb is 'buy'. Article placement with 'quite a sedentary person' is standard. Remove redundant 'therefore' when 'so' already conveys the result. Keep commas to separate clauses.

× Bike anode very popular in Hong Kong because the lanes are not designated for the rider and the roads are generally unsuitable for riding a bicycle.

✓ Bikes are not very popular in Hong Kong because lanes are not designated for cyclists and the roads are generally unsuitable for riding.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and word order ('Bike anode' is incorrect). Use plural 'Bikes' with plural verb 'are'. 'Not very popular' is the intended meaning. Use 'cyclists' or 'riders' instead of 'the rider' and avoid repeating 'bicycle' when 'riding' suffices.

× Umm for that reason people usually commute by public transport and or car for daily basis.

✓ For that reason, people usually commute by public transport or by car on a daily basis.

Preposition and collocation errors: use 'by public transport' and 'by car' with 'or' between them. Use the phrase 'on a daily basis' instead of 'for daily basis'. Add a comma after the introductory phrase.