Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and grammar errors: say “I had a bike” or “I rode a bike,” and describe what kind (e.g. a big bicycle) and one memory or reason why you liked it. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a large, sturdy bike with a metal frame, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood every weekend. Because the roads were safe near my home, I felt confident practicing tricks and riding longer distances with friends.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words to organize ideas. Replace vague phrases with clear points (e.g. lack of bike lanes, traffic, cultural preferences). Correct grammar: say “I don’t think bikes are very popular” and add an example of a city where they are more common. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes and roads are often too busy for safe cycling. However, in larger cities like Asana, cycling is more common among students and commuters because the city has better cycling paths and traffic management.

× I did a bike when I was a child uh and I liked uh ride a bike uh and uh, but you know, I had not umm uh small bike, a big.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and I liked riding a bike, but you know, I did not have a small bike; I had a big one.

Original contains incorrect verb choice 'did a bike' and missing gerund after 'liked'. Use 'had' for possession ('I had a bike') and the gerund 'riding' after 'liked'. Also use 'did not have' instead of 'had not' in conversational past negative. Add 'one' to refer back to 'bike'. Improve punctuation for clarity.

× Uh, uh, I think not, uh, not popular in our country because we, we don't have, uh, more Rd. uh, to, to ride with bike.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in our country because we don't have many roads to ride bikes on.

The sentence has tense and wording issues. Use 'I don't think' for present opinion. Replace 'not popular' with 'are popular' negated by 'don't' (subject-verb agreement). 'More Rd.' is incorrect — use 'many roads'. Use 'ride bikes on' instead of 'ride with bike'. Adjust word order to natural English.

× So I think not not popular and, but uh, in big city, for example, in Asana.

✓ So I think they're not popular, but in big cities, for example in Asana, they are more common.

Use a clear subject 'they' (bikes) with present tense 'are not popular'. Avoid double negatives 'not not'. Use plural 'big cities' unless a specific single city is meant. Provide a contrasting clause 'they are more common' to complete the idea and maintain consistent present-tense framing.