Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve tense consistency, grammar, and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and possessive forms. Avoid long run-on sentences and filler words.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I could sometimes borrow a neighbor’s tricycle, which I enjoyed riding around our street on weekends.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'popular form of transport'), remove fillers, and provide a specific supporting detail connected by a linking word (e.g., 'for example' or 'because'). Make sure verb tenses and articles are correct.

예시: Yes, bikes are a very popular form of transport in my city because they’re cheap and convenient. For example, many students ride bikes to school, and you often see bike lanes near universities and markets.

× When I was a child I don't have a bike because my parents can't afford to buy me one, but I have a neighborhood who has a Tri bike that I can borrow sometimes.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have a bike because my parents couldn't afford to buy me one, but I had a neighbor who had a tri bike that I could borrow sometimes.

The sentence refers to past time ('When I was a child'), so present tense verbs (don't have, can't afford, have, can borrow) are inconsistent. Use past tense forms: 'didn't have' and 'couldn't afford'. Also 'have a neighborhood' is incorrect—use 'had a neighbor' (singular person). Use past modal 'could' for borrowing. 'Tri bike' is a common noun and can be lowercased as 'tri bike'. Suggestions: keep all verbs in past tense to match the time frame and replace 'neighborhood' with 'neighbor' for the person.

× Oh yes, it's one of the most, umm, transportation that can be used in our city.

✓ Oh yes, it's one of the most common forms of transportation that can be used in our city.

The original uses 'one of the most, umm, transportation' which is ungrammatical: 'one of the most' must be followed by a plural noun or a superlative adjective phrase. 'Transportation' is an uncountable noun; say 'one of the most common forms of transportation' or 'one of the most common means of transportation'. Suggestion: insert an adjective phrase ('most common forms of') to correctly modify 'transportation'.

× Uh, it was usually, uh, right by some, umm, students.

✓ Usually, I saw bikes near some students.

The original sentence 'it was usually ... right by some students' is vague and has unclear subject reference ('it'). Improve clarity by specifying the subject and action: 'I saw bikes near some students' or 'Bikes were usually parked near students.' Also place adverb 'usually' in a natural position and remove filler words. Suggestion: use a clear subject and verb and position adverbs before the main verb for natural English.