Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ нужно сделать более естественным и грамматически правильным. Уберите лишние слова, исправьте ошибки согласования и артиклей, уточните описание и свяжите предложения связующим словом. Также избегайте разговорных сокращений. Например, вместо «it was a red girly bike with a beautiful butterflies there» — «it was a small red bike with butterfly decorations».

예시: Yes. I had a small red bike when I was a child. It had butterfly decorations on the frame and training wheels at first. I rode it around my neighbourhood every afternoon, which helped me learn to balance. Now I don't own a bike because they are expensive to buy and maintain.

제안: Нужна более точная структура и корректная лексика. Избегайте разговорных вставок («uh», «cause»), исправьте порядок слов и предлоги (например, «people can cycle», «many citizens are used to cycling there»). Приведите конкретные примеры и свяжите идеи связующими словами («for example», «because», «therefore»).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are still quite popular. In Moscow many people cycle because there are pleasant parks and dedicated bike paths. For example, Gorky Park and the Central Park are popular spots where residents often ride for leisure or exercise. Therefore cycling remains a common pastime for locals.

× it was a red girly bike with a beautiful butterflies there

✓ it was a red girly bike with beautiful butterflies on it

The phrase 'beautiful butterflies there' is grammatically incorrect. 'Butterflies' is a plural noun and should not be preceded by 'a' or 'a beautiful' when referring to multiple items; use 'beautiful butterflies'. Also the location should be expressed with the prepositional phrase 'on it' rather than 'there'. Suggestion: remove the extra article and add the preposition 'on' to show where the butterflies are.

× But now I haven't got any bikes 'cause it costs a lot

✓ But now I haven't got any bikes because they cost a lot

Subject-pronoun and verb agreement error and informal contraction. The singular verb 'it costs' does not agree with plural 'bikes'; use 'they cost'. Also replace informal 'cause' with 'because' in formal responses. Suggestion: match plural subject and verb and avoid informal contractions.

× I think that bicycles are still popular in my country cause in Moscow there are a lot beautiful places where people can drive

✓ I think that bicycles are still popular in my country because in Moscow there are a lot of beautiful places where people can ride them

Missing preposition 'of' in 'a lot of beautiful places' and incorrect verb 'drive' for bicycles (use 'ride'). Also use 'because' instead of informal 'cause', and add 'them' to clarify that people ride bicycles. Suggestion: include 'of' after 'a lot', use the correct verb for bicycles, and maintain formal conjunctions.

× For example, uh, it's Goku Park and central Moscow Park where a lot citizens are used to

✓ For example, there is Gorky Park and Central Moscow Park, which many citizens are used to visiting

Multiple issues: wrong park name 'Goku' should be 'Gorky'; 'it's' is awkward — use 'there is' or list names directly; 'a lot citizens' is missing 'of' and should be 'many citizens' or 'a lot of citizens'; 'are used to' requires a gerund ('visiting') to complete the idea. Suggestion: correct proper nouns, add 'of' or use 'many', and follow 'used to' with a verb in -ing form.