Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and simple linking words (e.g., "When I was a child,"). Avoid unrelated phrases (e.g., "I also have a bag"). Keep it under five sentences and make grammar consistent.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every afternoon with a friend around our neighborhood. We would race on quiet streets and stop at a small park to rest, which made those afternoons really fun.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons and a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Use simple, accurate vocabulary and correct sentence structure. Avoid confusing or unrelated phrases. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. Many people prefer bikes for commuting since traffic is heavy and parking is difficult, so cycling is often faster than taking a bus.

× I also have a bag.

✓ I also had a bag.

The examiner asked about the student's possessions when they were a child (past time). Using present tense 'have' is incorrect. Change to past tense 'had' to match the time frame of the question. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or states that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike and a bag when I was a child.').

× When I was a child, I often hang on with a friend circling around the neighborhood.

✓ When I was a child, I often hung out with a friend and circled around the neighborhood.

The sentence describes a habitual past action, so past simple forms are required. 'hang on' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrasal verb is 'hang out' meaning spend time together, and it must be in past form 'hung out.' 'circling' as present participle is awkward here; use past simple 'circled' or rephrase with 'and we would circle' for habitual past. Suggestion: For past habitual activities use past simple or 'used to' (e.g., 'I often hung out with a friend.' or 'I used to hang out with a friend and circle the neighborhood.').

× I think you're basically on conference and the country is the main transportation because they are so convenient and can top down and cannot read the schedules of the buses.

✓ I think bikes are very common, and they are a main method of transportation because they are convenient, affordable, and do not depend on bus schedules.

The original sentence has multiple problems: wrong pronoun 'you're' instead of 'they're' or 'bikes are,' incorrect noun 'on conference,' and unclear phrases 'can top down' and 'cannot read the schedules.' These are sentence structure and word choice errors. The meaning likely intended is that bicycles are common and are a main form of transport because they are convenient and not tied to bus timetables. Suggestion: Simplify and clarify: identify the subject 'bikes' and use clear reasons (e.g., '...they are convenient, inexpensive, and not limited by bus schedules.').