Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and include a linking word to connect the reason.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I was quite timid and afraid of falling, so my parents never bought one for me. As a result, I usually walked or used public transport to go to friends’ houses.

제안: Answer directly, avoid repetitions, and use clearer vocabulary and linking words. Give a specific reason and, if possible, a brief example or comparison. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Because cities are busy and distances can be long, most people prefer motorbikes, cars, or public transport. For example, many commuters choose scooters since they are faster and more convenient in heavy traffic.

× I don't have a bike when I were a child because I was scared of falling down and I'm timid, so I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of falling and I was timid, so I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student mixed present tense with past contexts. Use past tense for events in childhood: 'don't have' should be 'didn't have' and 'I'm timid' should be 'I was timid'. Also 'were' with 'I' is incorrect in this context; use 'was'. Use consistent past tense to match the time reference. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the past when talking about past situations (I didn't have, I was timid). Avoid mixing present and past in the same sentence.

× I don't think bikes bikes are popular in my country because my country is a a hustle and bustle country which people usually use motorbike instead of bikes and more people use public transportation and private car.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because my country is a busy, bustling place where people usually use motorbikes instead of bicycles, and more people use public transportation or private cars.

Errors: repeated words ('bikes bikes', 'a a') removed. 'hustle and bustle country' is unidiomatic; 'busy, bustling place' is natural. Subject-verb agreement and count nouns: 'motorbike' should be plural 'motorbikes' to match 'people'. 'Private car' should be plural 'private cars' or 'a private car' depending on context; here plural fits. Use 'instead of bicycles' for clarity. Also add conjunctions and commas for clarity. Suggestion: Eliminate duplicate words, use idiomatic expressions, keep noun forms consistent (plural when referring to people generally), and use commas to separate clauses.