Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition, correct tense and word choice, and make answers more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct verb tenses (use past tense for childhood) and avoid filler sounds (uh, um).

예시: Yes, I did. My father bought me a road bike when I was seven, and I rode it every day to school and to my after-school academy. Because my father taught me how to ride, I became confident cycling on busy streets.

제안: Be more precise and grammatical: use correct plural/singular forms and smoother linking words. Provide one clear reason, then add a specific example or comparison. Avoid vague phrases like 'you know' and repetitive words.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Korea. For example, many people cycle to work because it saves time and is less tiring than walking, especially in cities where distances are too long to walk comfortably.

× Then I use it when I commit, commit to school and when I go to my Academy, I use it on a on a daily basis.

✓ Then I used it to commute to school and to go to my academy; I used it on a daily basis.

The context is past (when I was seven), so present simple 'use' is incorrect. Change to past simple 'used'. Also 'commit, commit to school' is a mispronunciation or wrong verb; the correct verb is 'commute'. Use 'to commute to school' and keep parallel infinitive forms. Remove duplicate filler words and duplicate 'on a'. Improvement: maintain past tense for past events, use correct verb 'commute', and keep parallel structure.

× Then I use it when I commit, commit to school and when I go to my Academy, I use it on a on a daily basis.

✓ Then I used it to commute to school and to go to my academy; I used it on a daily basis.

'Academy' is a common noun and should not be capitalized unless it is part of a proper name. Use 'my academy' (lowercase). Also eliminate the repeated 'a' before 'daily basis'. Improvement: only capitalize proper nouns and avoid extra articles.

× I do think so because most of Korean tend to commute to work by bike rather than walk to the walk to the workplace because it's quite like saving time and it's not physically demanding compared to just walk around, you know?

✓ I do think so because most Koreans tend to commute to work by bike rather than walk to the workplace, because it saves time and is less physically demanding than walking around.

Multiple issues: noun pluralization ('most of Korean' should be 'most Koreans') and tense/verb forms. Use plural subject 'Koreans' (Grammar problem type: singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'It's quite like saving time' is unnatural; use 'it saves time'. 'Compared to just walk around' should be 'than walking around' — compare gerund forms. Improvement: use correct plural nouns, choose appropriate verb forms for general statements (present simple), and use 'than' plus gerund for comparisons.

× I do think so because most of Korean tend to commute to work by bike rather than walk to the walk to the workplace because it's quite like saving time and it's not physically demanding compared to just walk around, you know?

✓ I do think so because most Koreans tend to commute to work by bike rather than walk to the workplace, because it saves time and is less physically demanding than walking around.

'Most of Korean' is incorrect: the correct form is 'most Koreans' (plural). Use plural noun to match 'most'. Also ensure verb agreement: 'Koreans tend' (not 'tend' with singular). Improvement: use 'most' + plural noun for nationalities and groups.

× rather than walk to the walk to the workplace

✓ rather than walk to the workplace

The phrase contains a duplicated 'walk to the'. Remove the repetition and use correct preposition 'to the workplace'. Improvement: proofread to remove duplicated words and ensure correct preposition placement.

× because it's quite like saving time and it's not physically demanding compared to just walk around, you know?

✓ because it saves time and is less physically demanding than walking around, you know?

When making a general statement about what cycling does, use third person singular present simple 'saves' (it saves time) rather than 'it's quite like saving time'. Also after comparison use gerund 'walking' not base verb 'walk'. Improvement: use correct third person singular verbs and appropriate comparative structures.

× compared to just walk around

✓ compared to walking around

After 'compared to' you should use a noun or gerund form. 'Walking' is the gerund of 'walk' and correctly functions as the object of the preposition. Improvement: use gerunds after prepositions.

× My, my dad bought me a road bike when I was seven years old. Then I use it when I commit, commit to school and when I go to my Academy, I use it on a on a daily basis. And my father taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ My dad bought me a road bike when I was seven years old. Then I used it to commute to school and to go to my academy; I used it on a daily basis. My father also taught me how to ride a bike.

The original has filler repetition ('My, my'), tense inconsistency, duplicated words, and choppy sentence joins. Combine related ideas and keep consistent past tense. Improve flow by removing fillers and using connectors like 'also'. Improvement: avoid repetitions, keep tense consistent, and link sentences smoothly.