Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural, avoid filler words like "uh," and correct verb choice (use "ride" not "drive"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It had multicolored rubber tires and a small basket on the front where I could carry snacks. I often rode it around the neighbourhood to visit friends or to go to the shop.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words for contrast. Avoid repetition and filler sounds; use accurate phrases (e.g., "people with lower incomes"). Provide a specific example or brief comparison to support your point.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. On one hand, people with lower incomes often use bikes as their main form of transport because they are cheap and efficient. On the other hand, wealthier people tend to use bicycles mainly for leisure or exercise, for example riding in parks on weekends.

× It had multi colored uh rubber tires and a small cute basket at the front so I can put my things in it and I used to drive it throughout the neighborhood to buy groceries or to play with.

✓ It had multicolored rubber tires and a small cute basket at the front so I could put my things in it, and I used to ride it throughout the neighborhood to buy groceries or to play.

Multiple issues: 'can' should be backshifted to 'could' to match the past narrative (present participle/past tense sequence); 'drive' is not the correct verb for bicycles in this context—use 'ride'; 'multi colored' should be one word 'multicolored'. Suggestion: keep past-tense consistency when recounting past events, use 'could' instead of 'can', use 'ride' for bicycles, and join compound adjectives when conventional (multicolored).

× At some level they are popular and in my country because, uh, the people of lower in with lower income, they, they, that's the main transport for them.

✓ Bicycles are somewhat popular in my country because people with lower incomes use them as their main transport.

Problems include awkward word order and tense/phrase choices. 'At some level they are popular' is vague; using 'Bicycles are somewhat popular' is clearer. 'the people of lower in with lower income' is incorrect pronoun and preposition use; correct is 'people with lower incomes'. Remove redundant fillers and pronoun repetition. Maintain present tense as this is a general statement. Suggestion: use concise subject-first structure, correct preposition 'with' for income, and pluralize 'incomes' or use 'low incomes'. 'Main transport' is acceptable, but 'main form of transport' is another option.

× However, uh, the upper class people use it as an entertainment and just to play around with it.

✓ However, upper-class people use them for entertainment and just to play around with.

'Upper class people' should be hyphenated as 'upper-class' when used as an adjective. 'Use it' and 'play around with it' mismatch number: 'bicycles' is plural, so use 'them' and plural verbs/objects. Also 'as an entertainment' is incorrect article usage; 'for entertainment' is idiomatic. Suggestion: match pronouns and determiners to the noun's number, use 'for entertainment' rather than 'as an entertainment', and hyphenate compound adjectives.