Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words like “like” and try to keep it within 3–4 sentences. Add a brief detail (e.g., what kind, who gave them, or a memory) to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I did — I owned several bikes as a child. My favourite was a red BMX my parents bought me for my tenth birthday, and I spent most afternoons riding with friends around the neighbourhood.

제안: Improve grammar and coherence: begin with a direct statement, then use linking words (for example, because, so, and) and provide one specific reason or example. Correct subject references (e.g., “people in my hometown”) and avoid tense or agreement errors.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people in my hometown commute to work by bike because public transport is limited, and many children ride to school, especially during the warmer months.

× Like not only one, but several.

✓ Not just one, but several.

The original phrase 'Like not only one, but several' is colloquial and uses 'like' unnecessarily. While not a strict singular/plural error, the intent is to contrast one (singular) with several (plural). Rewriting to 'Not just one, but several' is grammatically correct and clearer. Suggest avoiding filler 'like' in formal responses.

× Yeah, most of my people in my hometown, you commute by bike to their work, So a lot of children commute by bicycle to school, and it's pretty common in my country.

✓ Yes. In my hometown, most people commute to work by bike, so many children ride bicycles to school, and it's very common in my country.

Multiple issues: 'most of my people' is an unnatural pronoun use; 'my people' should be 'most people' or 'most people in my hometown'. The sentence also had incorrect subject reference 'you commute' which incorrectly shifts person; it should describe what people do (third person) so use 'most people commute'. 'to their work' is awkward; 'to work' is idiomatic. Capitalization and punctuation errors ('So') were fixed and sentences combined for clarity. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for slightly more formal register and 'ride bicycles' is clearer than 'commute by bicycle' repeated.