Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, pronunciation and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence using correct past tense and subject-verb agreement: “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.” Keep it short and then add one brief supporting detail (reason or memory). Use linking words like “because” or “so” if giving a reason. Aim for 1–3 sentences, correct verb forms, and natural word order.

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school with my friends because our neighborhood was small and close to the school.

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, and improve clarity and vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific reason using linking words like “because” or “so.” Avoid filler words (uh) and repeat phrases. You can add a concrete example or brief statistic to make it more specific. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people find them cheaper to run than cars. For example, commuters often choose motorcycles or bicycles to avoid high petrol costs and traffic congestion.

× No, I had no bike when I were child.

✓ No, I had no bike when I was a child.

The error is a subject-verb disagreement with the singular subject 'I' and the verb form 'were'. This falls under singular/plural/subject-verb agreement. Use the past tense singular form 'was' with 'I' in this context. Also the phrase 'child' needs the article 'a' to be grammatical: 'a child'. Suggestion: use 'I was' for past tense and include the article: 'I was a child.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my in my country because most of the people cannot afford uh, petrol charges, so that's why they prefer bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because most people cannot afford petrol charges, so they prefer bikes.

Multiple small errors: duplicate words ('in my in my') should be removed; 'most of the people' is wordy and unnatural — use 'most people' (quantifier improvement); the filler 'uh' should be removed for written grammar; 'that's why they prefer bikes' is acceptable but redundant with 'so' — using either 'so' or 'that's why' is preferable. This response primarily involves unnecessary repetition and quantifier/article misuse. Suggestion: remove duplicated words, use 'most people' instead of 'most of the people', and eliminate fillers to make the sentence concise and grammatical.