Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrasing (e.g. "stole my bike" if it was playful, say "borrowed"). Correct verb forms and word order will improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small colourful bike when I was a child. For example, it was painted red, blue and green, and I used it to ride around my neighbourhood. However, my brother often borrowed it, so I didn’t always get a turn.

제안: Give a direct, confident topic sentence then support it with one or two clear reasons and a linking word. Reduce hesitation and fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, pronoun use). Be specific about places and reasons (e.g. traffic, public transport availability).

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Thailand overall. In cities like Bangkok, most people prefer motorcycles and public transport because of heavy traffic and convenient transit options. In contrast, bicycles are more common in quieter rural areas.

× The color is mixed with red, blue and green usually.

✓ The color was a mix of red, blue and green usually.

The student is describing a bike they had in the past, so present tense 'is' is incorrect. Use past tense 'was' and a noun phrase 'a mix of' for natural expression. Suggestion: keep past tense when narrating past experiences and use 'a mix of' to describe combined colors.

× I'm not really a type of like girls who ride a bike but I just have it just in case.

✓ I'm not really the type of girl who rides a bike, but I had it just in case.

Incorrect pronoun/ determiner and number: 'a type of like girls' is ungrammatical. Use 'the type of girl' (singular) and match verb tense to past ('had') because the context is past. Also change 'ride' to 'rides' to agree with 'girl'. Suggestion: use 'the type of' + singular noun and ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense.

× I ride it around like the neighborhood but usually my brother is the one who stole my bike and took it around the neighbor so I'm not usually get to.

✓ I used to ride it around the neighborhood, but usually my brother was the one who stole my bike and took it around the neighborhood, so I didn't usually get to.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'I ride' (present) conflicts with past narrative; 'is the one who stole' mixes present 'is' with past 'stole'; 'neighbor' should be 'neighborhood'; 'I'm not usually get to' is ungrammatical. Use consistent past: 'used to ride', 'was the one who stole', and 'didn't usually get to'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past habits and use correct verb forms for negative past ('didn't get to').

× I'm not sure 'cause umm, my friends who's like around like the country of Thailand, he usually said that like nobody like around, like the area from where he lived ride a bike.

✓ I'm not sure, because one of my friends from around Thailand usually said that nobody in the area where he lived rides a bike.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'my friends who's ... he' mixes plural and singular; use 'one of my friends' or make the subject plural. 'Country of Thailand' is awkward; use 'around Thailand'. Verb agreement 'ride' should be 'rides' for singular 'nobody' or 'the area'. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs in number, avoid redundant fillers like 'like', and use clearer prepositions ('from', 'in the area where').

× So I would say that in mainly in Bangkok, it's not riding a bike is not like a main transportation in Bangkok.

✓ So I would say that mainly in Bangkok, riding a bike is not a main form of transportation.

Awkward structure and tense/word order problems: 'in mainly in Bangkok' duplicates preposition; 'it's not riding a bike is not like a main transportation' is ungrammatical. Use 'mainly in Bangkok' and the noun phrase 'riding a bike is not a main form of transportation'. Suggestion: simplify word order and use 'form of transportation' for natural collocation.