Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors by using correct verb tenses and pronouns.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I rode to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. As I grew older, I had less free time because I took on more responsibilities at school, so I rode it less often.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer linking words. Remove filler sounds (uh, like) and give specific reasons and an example. Keep it within 1–3 sentences and use comparative language correctly.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to park in crowded cities. For example, many people use motorcycles or bicycles to travel short distances to work or the market, which saves time and money.

× Yes, I like when I was a child because in childhood we can do number of things because we do not have burden that much we can enjoy, we can play and I like that type of things.

✓ Yes, I liked it when I was a child because in childhood we could do a number of things; we did not have many burdens, so we could enjoy ourselves and play. I liked those kinds of things.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly (present 'like' with past 'was'). Use past tense consistently for past time (ID 5 Past tense issue). Also 'can do number of things' needs an article and pluralization ('a number of things') and 'do not have burden that much' is ungrammatical; use 'did not have many burdens' or 'didn't have many responsibilities' (ID 1 Singular and plural issue and ID 11 Preposition/phrase use). Suggested improvement: decide on past perspective and keep verbs in past (liked, could, did), add articles and correct quantifier usage ('a number of', 'many'), and use natural phrases ('enjoy ourselves', 'those kinds of things').

× But like as we get grower so our we have more responsibility as compared to children.

✓ But as we grow up, we have more responsibilities compared to children.

Original has incorrect verb form 'get grower' and extra words 'our we', causing sentence structure errors (ID 26 Sentence structure errors and ID 27 Subject-verb agreement). Use the phrasal verb 'grow up' and the plural 'responsibilities' (ID 1 Singular and plural issue). Also remove unnecessary fillers like 'like' and 'so' for clarity. Suggested improvement: use 'as we grow up' and pluralize 'responsibilities'.

× Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because uh, like bike is a very, uh, useful transportation for everyone because it is easy to commute from one place to another because the bike is small as compared to car.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because a bicycle is a very useful means of transportation for everyone; it is easy to commute from one place to another because a bicycle is smaller compared to a car.

Several issues: inconsistent singular/plural ('bikes' vs 'bike') and missing articles before 'car' (ID 1 Singular and plural issue and ID 22 Article errors). 'Transport' collocated as 'means of transportation' is more natural. Use comparative 'smaller' rather than 'small as compared to'. Also maintain consistent nouns (either plural 'bicycles' or singular 'a bicycle'). Suggested improvement: choose consistent number, use articles ('a car'), and correct comparative form ('smaller compared to a car').

× So we can commute to anywhere with very easily because there is, because it is a small one.

✓ So we can commute anywhere very easily because it is small.

The phrase 'commute to anywhere' is incorrect; use 'commute anywhere' or 'commute to any place' (ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions). 'With very easily' has wrong word order and extra preposition 'with' (ID 20 Incorrect adverb placement). 'Because there is, because it is a small one' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'because it is small'. Suggested improvement: remove unnecessary words and place adverbs next to verbs ('very easily').

× Thank you.

✓ (No correction needed: this closing is acceptable but not necessary in a spoken answer.)

'Thank you' is not a grammar error; it's a polite closing. Leave as is. If used in exam responses, it is acceptable but not required (ID 26 Sentence structure errors not applicable).