Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct tense and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you rode, who with, a memorable moment). Avoid redundant phrases like “from what I have remembered.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school. I usually rode it on weekends to visit my cousins and explore the neighborhood. For example, one summer we raced down a small hill near my house, which I still remember because it was thrilling.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases like “In my opinion, I think.” Use specific examples and a linking phrase to support your view. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., “so much bikers” → “so many cyclists”). Mention reasons for popularity (cheap, healthy, traffic) to make the answer more informative.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in rural areas. For instance, in my town of Pidorine many people cycle to work and school because it is inexpensive and convenient; consequently, you often see groups of cyclists on the roads during mornings and evenings.

× I did have a bike when I was in elementary.

✓ I had a bike when I was in elementary school.

The phrase 'did have' is unnecessary for a simple past statement; use simple past 'had'. Also 'in elementary' is incomplete—use 'elementary school'. This fits simple past narrative about childhood. Suggestion: Use simple past for past facts (I had) and include the full noun phrase ('elementary school').

× From what I have remembered, I usually use the bike during the weekends since during the time I have so much free time to play with my cousins and my friends.

✓ From what I remember, I usually used the bike on weekends because at that time I had so much free time to play with my cousins and friends.

There are multiple tense inconsistencies. 'From what I have remembered' mixes present perfect with a past habit—use 'From what I remember' or 'From what I recall'. 'I usually use the bike' should be past habit 'I usually used the bike' because the context is childhood. 'During the weekends' is better as 'on weekends'. 'Since during the time I have so much free time' mixes tenses; change to past 'because at that time I had so much free time'. Also omit redundant 'my' before 'friends'. Suggestions: Keep tense consistent (past for past habits), use correct preposition 'on weekends', and simplify connectors ('because', 'at that time').

× In my opinion, I think bikes are extremely popular in our country, especially in the countryside.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are extremely popular in our country, especially in the countryside.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically but contains redundancy: 'In my opinion, I think' is repetitive. Remove one to be concise. No tense change needed. Suggestion: Use only one phrase expressing opinion ('In my opinion' or 'I think').

× In the town that I live in named Pidorine, there's so much bikers going around the neighborhood.

✓ In the town where I live, called Pidorine, there are so many bikers going around the neighborhood.

Errors: 'the town that I live in named Pidorine' is awkward—use 'the town where I live, called Pidorine'. 'There's' (there is) is singular but 'bikers' is plural, causing subject-verb disagreement; use 'there are'. 'So much bikers' incorrectly uses 'much' with a countable plural; use 'so many bikers'. Suggestions: Use 'there are' for plural existence, 'many' with countable nouns, and rephrase the relative clause for clarity.