Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Tránh lặp từ và câu dài thiếu mạch lạc. Ví dụ: loại bỏ ‘it’ thừa trong ‘bought it for me’, sửa các dạng số ít/ số nhiều (friend → friends), thì (enjoy → enjoyed hoặc use present simple consistently), và thêm liên từ hợp lý để câu mạch lạc. Hãy giới hạn câu không quá 4-5 câu và đưa vào một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi bạn thường đạp, cảm xúc khi nhận xe).

예시: I had a pink bicycle my father bought me when I was ten. All my friends had bikes too, so we rode to school together every day. I enjoyed cycling a lot because it made me feel free and gave me time to chat with my friends. I also learned to fix a flat tyre on my own, which made me proud.

제안: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, chọn từ phù hợp và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng. Sửa lỗi số ít/ số nhiều (bicycle → bicycles), bỏ từ thừa (‘for to’ → for), dùng từ đúng (effective friendly → environmentally friendly or cost-effective), và diễn đạt so sánh đúng (children use them more). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: thành phố nào, loại đường, mục đích) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and to keep fit because they are cheap and environmentally friendly. For example, in smaller towns people often ride to the market or school. Children also use bikes more than before because they are easy to maintain.

× When I was 10 years old, I had a pink bicycle that my father bought it for me.

✓ When I was 10 years old, I had a pink bicycle that my father bought for me.

The sentence contains a redundancy caused by using both the relative clause 'that my father bought' and the object pronoun 'it'. Remove 'it' to make the relative clause correct: 'bought for me'. Keep past tense to match the time frame.

× All of my friend had it so we used to bicycle to ride to school every day and I really enjoy cycling and become.

✓ All of my friends had one, so we used to ride our bicycles to school every day, and I really enjoyed cycling.

Several issues: 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to agree with 'all of'; 'had it' is vague—use 'had one' or 'had them'; 'used to bicycle to ride' is redundant—use 'used to ride our bicycles'; 'enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' to match 'when I was 10' context; 'and become' is incomplete and unnecessary, so remove it. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent past tense.

× Yes, bicycle are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

Singular noun 'bicycle' does not agree with plural verb 'are'. Use plural noun 'bicycles' to match 'are'.

× Many people use them for to commute short distance to and to stay fit because they are cheap and effective friendly.

✓ Many people use them to commute short distances and to stay fit because they are cheap and efficient.

Remove the redundant 'for', use infinitive 'to commute'; 'short distance' should be plural 'short distances'; 'to and to' is redundant—combine with 'and'; 'effective friendly' is incorrect collocation—use 'efficient' or 'cost-effective'. Keep parallel structure with two infinitives.

× The children use it than more than.

✓ Children use them more than before.

Pronoun and structure errors: 'The children' can be generalized to 'Children'; 'use it' should be 'use them' to refer to bicycles (plural); 'than more than' is ungrammatical—if comparing to the past, say 'more than before'. Provide clear comparative phrase.