Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition and incorrect noun plurals. Use linking words (for example, “so” or “therefore”) and correct verb forms (e.g., “went,” “had,” “bikes”).

예시: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but I often used my brother’s when we went to school together. Because it was convenient, we also used it for short shopping trips, which saved time and money for our family.

제안: Be more precise and avoid filler words. Use present tense for general facts and provide one specific reason with a linking word. Correct article and number usage (e.g., “many households have two or three bikes”).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many households have two or three bicycles or motorbikes because they are an affordable and fast way to commute to school and markets, so families often travel together by bike.

× I never had a bike of my own, but my brother did and after he got it we often go to school together.

✓ I never had a bike of my own, but my brother did, and after he got it we often went to school together.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'got' is past, so the following verb should also be past. Use 'went' (past tense) instead of 'go' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same time frame when describing past events; here use past tense verbs such as 'went.'

× Having the bike was the most convenient thing that happened in our life because we could go to the groceries together and every household had often one or two bike of their own.

✓ Having a bike was the most convenient thing that happened in our lives because we could go to the grocery together and every household often had one or two bikes of their own.

Multiple article and noun-form errors: 'the bike' implies a specific bike; use 'a bike' for general reference. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' for more than one person. 'the groceries' is incorrect for the act of grocery shopping; use 'the grocery' or better 'grocery shopping' or 'the grocery store'. 'often' is misplaced; place it before 'had'. 'bike' must be plural 'bikes' after 'one or two'. Suggestion: Use 'a' for non-specific singular nouns, ensure plural nouns match quantity, and place adverbs like 'often' before the main verb.

× Yes, I would say the bikes are very popular, especially the bicycles and the motorbikes.

✓ Yes, I would say bikes are very popular, especially bicycles and motorbikes.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before plural general nouns is incorrect when speaking generally. Also 'bikes are very popular' fits present general statement tense; remove extra 'the'. Suggestion: Drop 'the' when referring to categories in general: say 'bikes' not 'the bikes.'

× Uh, every household had at least two or three bicycles of their own for the parents and their children to commute together to go to school or shopping as it would save a lot of time.

✓ Uh, every household had at least two or three bicycles of its own for the parents and their children to commute together to go to school or shopping, as it saved a lot of time.

Tense consistency: the sentence is recounting past habits ('had'), so the clause explaining the result should also be past: use 'saved' not 'would save.' Pronoun agreement: 'every household' is singular, so use 'its own' instead of 'their own.' Suggestion: Match tense across clauses and use singular possessive ('its') with 'every'.