Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Javobingiz tabiiy va samimiy, lekin unchalik aniq va tartibli emas. Siz takroriy “uh” kabi to‘ldiruvchi so‘zlardan ko‘p foydalangansiz va gapingiz grammatika jihatdan ba’zi xatolarga ega (masalan, “all of them has had” o‘rniga “all of them had” yoki “all of them owned” ishlatish kerak). Shuningdek, gap uzunligi me’yoriga mos, lekin mavzuni yanada boyitish uchun bir yoki ikki aniqlovchi tafsilot (qanday ko‘rinishdagi velosiped, qaerda minardingiz yoki nima uchun yoqtirganingiz) qo‘shing va bog‘lovchi so‘zlardan foydalaning (for example, because, so, therefore).

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle when I was about six; my father bought it for me as a birthday present. Because most of my friends owned bikes, I loved riding too, and I would ride to the park every weekend to practice.

제안: Javobingiz ma’noli, lekin yanada aniq va tartibli bo‘lishi mumkin. Siz qaroringizni asoslash uchun qo‘shimcha faktlar keltirishingiz kerak (masalan, transport tizimi, shahar sharoiti yoki ob-havo sababli). Bog‘lovchi so‘zlardan foydalanib fikrni aniqroq bog‘lang (for instance, however, because). Grammatik jihatdan ham kichik tuzatishlar zarur (masalan, “most of the things rely on” o‘rniga “people mostly rely on”).

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular nationwide. In rural areas many people still use bikes for short trips, but in cities most people rely on public transport or cars because distances are longer and traffic is heavy.

× my peers, all of them has had their own bike.

✓ my peers, all of them have had their own bikes.

'Peers' is plural so the verb must be 'have' not 'has'; also 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'all of them' (plural possessors). Use: 'have had their own bikes.'

× So that's why I.

✓ So that's why I felt that I should have a bike.

The original fragment 'So that's why I.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a main verb or idea. Complete the thought by adding a verb and object. For example: 'So that's why I felt that I should have a bike.' This provides a full clause and links to prior context.

× I really love uh, riding a bike because, uh, my peers, all of them has had their own bike.

✓ I really loved riding a bike because my peers all had their own bikes.

The question asked about childhood ('when you were a child'), so past tense is more appropriate: use 'loved' instead of 'love'. Also remove filler 'uh' and simplify structure. Ensure subject-verb agreement and plural form as corrected above.

× in most of the cities, uh, most of the things rely on public transportation instead of bikes or others.

✓ in most cities, most people rely on public transportation rather than on bikes or other means.

Use 'in most cities' (not 'in most of the cities') and 'most people' (not 'most of the things'). 'Rely on' requires the preposition 'on'. Use 'rather than' for contrast and 'other means' is more natural than 'others' here.

× Uh, I don't think so because in the past or even right now, in some villages bikes are quite popular.

✓ I don't think so because, in the past and even now, bikes were quite popular in some villages.

Mixing 'in the past or even right now' is awkward; use 'in the past and even now'. However, since earlier context refers to childhood, prefer past tense 'were' for 'in the past' and clarify 'even now' separately. Keep consistent tense usage.