Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, use correct tense and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., I didn’t have a bike), then give one or two specific supporting details using past tense and linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and repeated phrases. Also correct grammar: use 'didn't have' for past negative and 'I had a bicycle' to state possession.

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but I had a small bicycle that I often used. For example, I rode it to visit my friend every afternoon, and I enjoyed cycling because it made me feel free and active.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I don't think bikes are very popular' or 'Bikes are popular in some areas'). Avoid vague phrasing like 'I don't think so much about'. Provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons.

예시: I think bikes are moderately popular in my country, especially in cities with bike lanes. For instance, many people use bicycles for short trips to work or the market because it is cheap and good exercise, although cars are still more common for longer journeys.

× No, I don't have a bike whenever I am a child, but I but that time I have a bicycle and I am, uh, cycling on that, on that time and I have enjoyed more, more cycling.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but at that time I had a bicycle and I used to ride it. I enjoyed cycling a lot.

Issues: present tense used incorrectly for past events (should use past tense) which corresponds to 'Past tense issue' and 'Present tense issue' and 'Sentence structure errors'. 'Whenever I am a child' is wrong; use 'when I was a child'. Repeated and awkward phrases like 'but I but that time' should be reorganized to 'but at that time'. 'I have a bicycle' and 'I am... cycling' should be past: 'I had a bicycle' and 'I used to ride it' or 'I rode it'. 'I have enjoyed more, more cycling' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I enjoyed cycling a lot'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past experiences, simplify redundant words, and use standard phrasing like 'when I was a child', 'at that time', 'I had', 'I used to ride', 'I enjoyed'. Next time, plan the sentence before speaking to avoid repetitions and filler words.

× But uh, I don't think so much about the, umm, bike are popular in our country. Umm, but my opinion, uh, I guess, uh, good for exercise.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. In my opinion, they are good for exercise.

Problems: mixed tenses and incorrect word order. 'I don't think so much about the, umm, bike are popular' mixes negation and subject-verb order; correct structure is 'I don't think bikes are very popular' (subject 'bikes' plural matches 'are'). The phrase 'my opinion, I guess, good for exercise' lacks a verb and subject agreement; use 'In my opinion, they are good for exercise.' This addresses 'Sentence structure errors', 'Subject-verb agreement', and 'Incorrect use of pronouns'. Suggestion: Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, match plural nouns with plural verbs, and avoid filler words to make speech clearer.