Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте ответ более естественным и информативным. Начните с чётного утверждения, затем добавьте краткое пояснение или деталь (например, кто подарил велосипед и какие воспоминания связаны с ним). Избегайте лишних слов и посторонних фраз. Удерживайте ответ в пределах 2–3 предложений, используя связующие слова для плавности.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was three years old. My father bought it for me as a birthday present, and I remember learning to ride in our small backyard.

제안: Уберите заполнители («uh», «frankly speaking») и сделайте утверждение более уверенным и конкретным. Дайте одну-две конкретные причины или примеры (например статистика, наблюдения в городах или различия между возрастными группами), используя связку («because», «for example», «however») для логики. Держите ответ в 2–3 предложениях, избегая повторов.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many children prefer using mobile phones for entertainment. For example, I often see kids playing games or watching videos instead of riding outside.

× I was about this bike by my father.

✓ I was given this bike by my father.

The student used the preposition 'about' incorrectly. The intended meaning is that the father gave the bike to the student, which requires the passive verb 'given' with the preposition 'by' to indicate the agent. Use the verb 'give' in the correct passive form 'was given' to express receiving something from someone. Suggestion: learn common verbs and their passive forms (e.g., give → was/were given) and practice prepositions that indicate agency (by).

× Frankly speaking, I don't uh, think that bikes are popular in my country because many children now prefer using their mobile phones for entertaining instead of active hobbies.

✓ Frankly speaking, I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because many children now prefer using their mobile phones for entertainment instead of active hobbies.

The phrase 'for entertaining' uses the present participle incorrectly; the correct noun is 'entertainment'. This is a preposition + noun collocation issue: 'prefer ... for entertainment' is natural, while 'for entertaining' implies performing the action. Suggestion: choose the correct noun form after prepositions (entertainment) or use the -ing form correctly when indicating the action (e.g., 'prefer entertaining themselves with their phones').