Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense and articles), reduce filler words, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., “and”, “so”, “after”) and be more specific about events. Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was nine. My dad taught me how to ride it, and I fell off several times at first. After practicing for a few weeks, I was able to ride to the main road confidently.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then provide two clear, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “however”). Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Improve vocabulary (e.g., “common”, “drivers”, “accidents”) and grammar (plural/singular, verb forms).

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many roads are busy and people prefer to use cars. As a result, cycling can be dangerous, and there are frequent accidents involving cyclists. Therefore, fewer people choose bikes for daily travel.

× I have a bike when I was nine years old, my dad teach me how to bike and I filled out uh several times before I can bike to a main Rd.

✓ I had a bike when I was nine years old. My dad taught me how to ride a bike and I fell off several times before I could ride to a main road.

Multiple tense and verb-form errors: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'was nine years old' (present vs past conflict). 'teach' should be past 'taught' (past tense required). 'filled out' is incorrect word choice; intended 'fell off' (to fall from a bike). 'can' should be past ability 'could'. Also 'bike' as a verb is informal; 'ride a bike' is more natural. 'Rd.' should be written as 'road'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when describing past events, use correct past forms and collocations (teach→taught, fall off→fell off, can→could). Use sentence separation for clarity.

× Uh, in my opinion bikes are not quite popular in my country because there is a lot of main road and people usually use a car so some sometime they do uh, illegal drive and maybe hit up by people.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not very popular in my country because there are many main roads and people usually use cars, so sometimes they drive illegally and may hit people.

Several grammar issues: 'there is a lot of main road' mixes singular/plural and article use; correct is 'there are many main roads' (plural and quantifier). 'use a car' should be plural 'use cars' to match general statement. 'some sometime they do uh, illegal drive' is ungrammatical—use 'sometimes they drive illegally'. 'maybe hit up by people' incorrectly uses passive/phrasing; intended meaning likely 'may hit people' (active). Also adjust adverb placement ('in my opinion' followed by comma). Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'many', use adverbs correctly, prefer active voice for clarity, and maintain consistent tense (present simple for general truths).